TPO-13 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Families are the most important factor in our lives because they stay together and help each other in good and bad days. I currently live in a small family but in my childhood, I lived in an extended family, with my grandparents, uncle, aunt, and my cousins. I personally think extended families are better than a small family. There are numerous benefits to live in a joint family.
First of all, I used to live in a joint family and the first thing I learned is shearing and help others. These qualities are much needed in modern days as peoples usually live in small families and peoples are becoming selfish. The other thing is peoples feel more connected to their families and they help each other because they eat together and live in a same house and shear everything, the joy or the sorrow.
The second point, in a child’s education, extended families plays an important role. For example, when I was a child my grandmother used to tell stories from storybooks and that way I grow a habit of reading literature. My grandfather used to tell me histories about my country and he was the first mathematics teacher. As a child live together with other family members, they can learn the life lesson from them and they have a playing companion as a child lives with the cousins. As compared to in small family parents usually find time to play with their child as he does not have a playing companion. In my personal experience, my aunt used to take care of me while my mother was busy, and this is another positive point for a joint family. I think, for working parents, they do not need to take much pressure and does not need a babysitter if they live in an extended family, unlike small families.
Some peoples argue that there are many disadvantages while live in a joint family, like cannot eat some specific food without shearing or cannot buy clothes without giving others and sometimes it cost more. Sometimes there are misunderstandings for properties or with children. But, with all that negative points, I would say that extended families are better because they are more flexible and they stay together and an important intergraded part of our life.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, while, for example, i think, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1804.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72251308901 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59265408651 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468586387435 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9427027195 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.117647059 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4705882353 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05882352941 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109517601111 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0446416654311 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0330858261648 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0754380765501 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0299458257409 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.