Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
When I was 5, I used to play with crayons and wanted to be a painter. I grew up a little, and at 10, I used to gaze upon the stars and wanted to be an Astronaut. I grew up a little more, and at 16, I used to idolize sport stars and wanted to be a cricketer. I also remember being amazed by the wildlife and wanting to be an adventurer, not even knowing what it meant. Will I end up pursuing any of the passions that I had in my younger days? Probably not. Does it mean that any of those professions is any lesser than the one I'm pursuing now? Absolutely not. It's just that as I grew older and wiser, I have identified my strengths, weaknesses, and talents and I'm in a much better situation to chose a career that suits me the best. All through this journey, my schools have played a crucial part in helping me make those realizations. And that is what I believe is the responsibility of the educational institutes: to help the students in discovering what career paths suit them the best.
Most of the decisions that young children make are not based on practical considerations. However, it does not mean that they are tantamount to nothing. The dreams that the children see for themselves and their future indicate their general interests. The role that educational institutes have to play there, is to help their students ground these dreams in reality. After this, if a student is actually motivated to achieve the goal and was not just influenced by the fame that the goal brings, he will work hard and try to achieve it. If not, he will look for another goal for himself all while becoming more mature and self-aware. When a young child aspires to be a sport star, he might be inspired by the thrill of the sport or by the fame that it brings. After being shown the true picture, he can decide for himself if he wants to pursue it or not.
In my opinion, there is no field of study that is likely to give more success than the others. It all depends on the individual and his interests and strengths. If we see the distribution, all the fields will follow the famous Bell's curve, which means that in each field there will be people who are very successful and people who can't make it through their studies, while most of the people in that field will lie somewhere around the middle. At least in India, a lot of students get influenced by the bloated income figures in the news channels and opt for fields which they think will give them more success, only to end up realizing, albeit too late, that they were not made for it. This is yet another situation, where schools need to play a big role, i.e. in making students see through the spurious paparazzi and helping them realize the fact that if they're truly interested in any field of study, they can be successful in it.
One might argue that people should be left alone to make their own decisions as is their right. To counter that I'd say that in helping the students in the ways mentioned before, schools wouldn't be influencing the students but only helping them make more informed choices. Young minds are malleable and they need to be handled with care. Schools have a huge role to play in shaping the minds of these children to help make them better humans. A person can only thrive in today's society if he truly understands himself.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, look, so, while, at least, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.3162921348 230% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 83.0 33.0505617978 251% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2706.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 609.0 442.535393258 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.44334975369 5.05705443957 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96768813016 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45542331885 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453201970443 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 819.9 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.59117977528 82% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 6.24550561798 288% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.9071069667 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.222222222 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5555555556 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.74074074074 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109962342497 0.243740707755 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0267920182155 0.0831039109588 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0316117223439 0.0758088955206 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0654620109217 0.150359130593 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310278639283 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.53 48.8420337079 153% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 12.1743820225 68% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.77 12.1639044944 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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