Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing
fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most
compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
In the present world, education is one of the most imperative factors behind the better future of our society. Thus educational institutes have a responsibility to pave the way for the success of their students by guiding them in the proper field of study suitable for them. The above prompt sets out that educational institutes should dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed. While I concede that education institutes should asses their judgment of students based on the path their students want to take but in my opinion, I mostly disagree with the fact that educational institutes should discourage their students from pursuing their field of study in which they are unlikely to succeed for three reasons.
To begin with, some students may not show talent now but may succeed in the future. Sometimes great people do not show their talents when there young but later they show their talent that no one could ever imagine. For example, Albert Einstein when he was young was not good at school workings but after his uncle introduced him to math he find his interest in math and later invent many groundbreaking innovations which led to his winning of Nobel Prize that no one at his time had thought of. The above example shows that a student might not be good at some topic when he is young but after a lot of hard work, he might find his subject of interest and become successful. Thus institutes should not preclude a student from pursuing his field of interest, one can not say that the student might become a connoisseur of the subject in near future.
Furthermore, a school is where one goes for learning the skills that his\her family might not have the means or resources to do so. For example, most of the school students from Indian villages have to go to an internet cafe to do their typewritten homework because they do not have a computer in their house. The family cannot teach them about using a computer, browsing the internet, and editing on Microsoft Office programs, but the school, upon giving this homework, has done so and expects you to use these skills in the future. By this example, we can say that educational institutes like schools pave a wider path of success for a student and help them to widen the road to success.
However, sometimes student’s preferable field of study has some other components in which he is not good enough then institutes should inhibit him to pursue the field of study. Let’s take an example that a student's choice of topic is Bio Math while he is good in mathematics but he does not have any knowledge about Biology. Then in the future, he will be at a disadvantage if he chooses bio-math. Moreover, sometimes student chooses physics since he has an interest in physics without knowing anything about advanced math which is necessary to do advanced physics. The above example illustrates that sometimes the institute should preclude him from pursuing his preferable field of study since without a full understanding of the bigger picture the student may not succeed in near the future.
But it will be wrong to say that institutions should persuade students to pursue only success-assured fields as the possibility of getting success depends on a large number of factors and one cannot forecast them. The best possible encouragement a student must be given is to do whatever they like and habitually develop advancement in that field.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ehind the better future of our society. Thus educational institutes have a responsib...
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Suggestion: disagree that
...ant to take but in my opinion, I mostly disagree with the fact that educational institutes should discourag...
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...ter his uncle introduced him to math he find his interest in math and later invent m...
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...oisseur of the subject in near future. Furthermore, a school is where one goes ...
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Suggestion: many; numerous
...ssibility of getting success depends on a large number of factors and one cannot forecast them. T...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, thus, while, for example, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 33.0505617978 194% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 92.0 58.6224719101 157% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2864.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 591.0 442.535393258 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84602368866 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93056706295 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62411946381 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43654822335 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 890.1 704.065955056 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.1635063805 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.2 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.55 23.4991977007 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279671706189 0.243740707755 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0942090421636 0.0831039109588 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0955733056312 0.0758088955206 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156999051881 0.150359130593 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103675431298 0.0667264976115 155% => OK
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.