Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Choosing the field of study is a difficult decision for any student, be it a high school elective or a graduation degree. This choice could be a lot easier if the educational institute counsel the student first about all the fields uninterestedly. The prompt suggests that the institutions should guide the students towards those fields that have profitable careers. However, I mostly disagree with the prompt for following three reasons.
Firstly, in this constantly changing world, where use of internet is growing profusely, it is not great option to choose among the money making careers. In addition, there are huge mass of people who are running a race to find a secure career which will allow them to afford affluent lifestyle. This makes it difficult for students to accurately predict whether the lucrative career in present will yield the promised amount in future. For instance, during 1990’s when first computer was invented, educational institutions mainly highlighted the hardware portion of computer science causing more people opting for hardware engineering. Later after five to six years, the demand for hardware engineers were minimum with very high competition. Thus, it is essential to focus on the right option to study rather than preparing for lucrative careers.
Further, to achieve success in life person should have passion for what they do in life. Steve Jobs in one of his interview said “ To be best one among huge mass, you have to know your passion. Otherwise, everything you do will be enervating task for you”. As suggested by one of the legends, who followed his passion and become successful in every part of the field he worked on. It is essential to have interest to work relentlessly. Moreover, we can also exemplify boxer Mohamad Ali, who was world champion for many years, loved what he choose to do throughout his life and thus made him successful. There are many other personalities like Warren Buffet, Bill Gates who were drop out but they excelled in whatever they did because they loved what they did. Therefore, it is essential to love the work you do rather than educational institution teaching you which career path to follow.
Furthermore, careers are always temporary. What is lucrative today might be all lost in the near future. The world is highly volatile. Those who choose any field of study on the basis of the profitability of a career, might regret due to the changing nature of the world. Let's take this as an instance. Few years back, Nuclear scientists were a lot popular. There was race to become a nuclear scientist all over the world. The job was demanding and the governments of many countries too were interested. But, after the nuclear mess happened in Chernobyl, the job has faded away and now those students are struggling. Nowadays software is popular and no one knows how long will it be on the trend. So, choosing any study field by looking at the job prospect should not be encouraged most of the time.
This choice differs from person to person and cannot be generalized to all people by looking at some few cases. However, Educational institutes should first encourage students to choose their field of study according to their passion and then move towards the lucrative career.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... present will yield the promised amount in future. For instance, during 1990’s when first...
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Message: The article is probably missing here: 'during the 1990’s'.
Suggestion: during the 1990’s
...romised amount in future. For instance, during 1990’s when first computer was invented, educa...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'be the best'.
Suggestion: be the best
... Jobs in one of his interview said “ To be best one among huge mass, you have to know y...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'chooses'.
Suggestion: chooses
... champion for many years, loved what he choose to do throughout his life and thus made...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'dropped'.
Suggestion: dropped
...like Warren Buffet, Bill Gates who were drop out but they excelled in whatever they ...
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Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...ue to the changing nature of the world. Lets take this as an instance. Few years bac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2728.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 547.0 442.535393258 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98720292505 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65507444432 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 291.0 215.323595506 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531992687386 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 846.9 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.1959652065 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6451612903 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90322580645 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311671577598 0.243740707755 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0723932463418 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070065618568 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171883295357 0.150359130593 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344851805757 0.0667264976115 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.1392134831 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 100.480337079 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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