GRE sample issue pool essay topic 1
To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Humans have now lived as a social animal for more than 10,000 years. From the stone age, age of barbarians to the modern sophisticated life, we have come a long way. We have gained knowledge of stars, galaxies, atoms and molecules and yet we are still searching answers for what important features make up human society. The prompt suggests that, to understand what the important characteristics of a society are, major cities need to be studied. However, I mostly disagree for following three reasons.
First of all, major cities comprise only a small proportion of people as compared to the total population of the world. Most inhabitants live around in the far country side and unpopular places even in the developed countries. So, the results obtained from studying the major cities cannot be generalized to all the population around the world. For instance, in this covid-infected time, Australian government looked at the worsening situation of the major cities of Australia and announced a nation-wide lockdown. However, the indigenous people of Australia who live far from the major cities, were not affected by covid but were nonetheless restricted due to lockdown. It has caused a huge rift among the indigenous population and the government. So, major cities cannot be even be representative of all the people in the country let alone the whole world.
Secondly, the society in major cities of the world are very introverted and non-interacting in an unnatural way. The haste of work, study and responsibility have made the people across major places isolated. They cannot interact even if they wanted to. Due to this, the results of the study might be somehow affected and might not be as expected. But in less famous places, and country, the people tend to communicate more often and studying those places can result in more natural result. Let's take this as an instance. The people in New York and Washington are too busy even to talk to their own family. They have much convoluted life and have no idea what their neighbor does. How can we get a good report on the formation of a society when everyone is isolated to themselves and have no interaction at all?
Although, major cities cannot represent the whole world and the people living in the major cities are isolated, the study can provide some good observation as well. For example, Major cities are much more crowded, be it in USA, UK or Nepal. The major reason for why the big cities are most populated is job prospect, money and facilities. This mean the majority of human society is driven by their basic instinct to survive and prosper. For this reason, even the towns and villages have started to develop the facilities as that of the cities. This rule or law is followed by each and every person and society in the world. Hence, there are other prospects similar to these that could be obtained from study of people in major cities.
The study of important feature of any human society is still in developmental phase and only studying some major populated area will not yield better result. All the major cities, as well as other parts of the world needs to be carefully examined to actually know how human have thrived well living in society for these long years.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, hence, however, if, look, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, still, well, for example, for instance, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2703.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 555.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87027027027 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85370353223 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62194666881 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481081081081 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 871.2 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.5180168623 60.3974514979 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.1 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138676181279 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0427449199453 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392909143827 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0892358255435 0.150359130593 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245275410453 0.0667264976115 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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