Educational institutions should dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
P#1
The exploration of a specific field can be really hard, sometime it may seem endless and useless, and feelings such as frustration will accompany when we study. So many people think that educational institutions should dissuade students from pursuing fields in which they are unlikely to succeed. However, from mt perspective, I hold the a disagree position in this issue, reasons are as follows:
P#2
Firstly, for individuals, it does harm to their personal growth. Sometime we need to admit that we will learn more in failure than in success. We may critical ourselves more when we suffer failure while we may become proud when success all the time. So if students crowd into those fields which are easy to research, they would experience less straw back which may lead to a unmature adults in the future, doing harm to them. Also, too much students would cause involution, resulting to too much peer pressure which may lead to psychology disease.
P#3
What’s more, it is not an aptly policy for the development of country. The leading effect will cause unbalance of the technology nationwide. For example, many applied filed will reach prosperous while some fundamental filed such as mathematics or biology will be abandoned as garbage, however, the basis of the nation power lies in there. Those fields which are important to society always need many efforts and are hard to succeed, but we couldn’t explore them only because we afraid of failure. Therefore, we shouldn’t conduct this policy for the future of our country.
P#4
Lastly, people are various from each other. Some people may think math is hard while others are afraid of English, so how to judge if a field is unlikely to success? There is no right answer, only the answer that fit ourselves. So, this issue is impossible to make it come true in reality. Also, this thought is insulting the freedom of human being: we all have our own interest, the society should encourage us to pursue our interest and go our own path rather than leading us to a same way.
P#5
From all we have discussed above, for individuals, for our country, for the freedom as a human being, I strongly hold the view that educational institutions shouldn’t dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed. Between the right path and easy path, we should choose the right path.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 335, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: the; a
...d. However, from mt perspective, I hold the a disagree position in this issue, reason...
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Line 2, column 339, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...owever, from mt perspective, I hold the a disagree position in this issue, reasons are as ...
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Line 4, column 374, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ience less straw back which may lead to a unmature adults in the future, doing ha...
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Line 4, column 385, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'adult'?
Suggestion: adult
...straw back which may lead to a unmature adults in the future, doing harm to them. Also...
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Line 4, column 437, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...e future, doing harm to them. Also, too much students would cause involution, result...
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Line 6, column 24, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('aptly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('policy') instead of another adjective.
...y disease. P#3 What’s more, it is not an aptly policy for the development of country. The lea...
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Line 6, column 476, Rule ID: I_AFRAID[2]
Message: You miss the verb here. You should rather write: 'we're afraid'.
Suggestion: we're afraid
...t we couldn’t explore them only because we afraid of failure. Therefore, we shouldn’t con...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, may, really, so, therefore, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1979.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 404.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89851485149 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56296432835 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532178217822 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.2056722065 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.157894737 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2631578947 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42105263158 5.21951772744 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235866797181 0.243740707755 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747922348143 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109228499847 0.0758088955206 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155199419678 0.150359130593 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0981482170839 0.0667264976115 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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