Some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. Others believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
P#1
Education is vital in a person’s life, we all reach a consensus that if you want to live in a high-quality life, then you have to receive well education. However, there are different attitude in education on its effect on the spiritual world of people. Some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit while the others believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free. From my perspective, I hold the view that education tends to set our minds free rather than restrict them, reasons are as follows:
P#2
First, education enables us be access to more knowledge which may help us broaden the horizon and view the phenomenon occurred in life more thoroughly. For example, by learning economy we would have a better view of the market and we would understand why the price of currency change in the way we see in internet and thus we would think more when we read the economy news, leading to more freedom in our mind. Also, if we are exposed to some politics, then we will understand why a country made that choice under that circumstance, thus we would view the political world in a higher angle of view, which is definitely set our minds free.
P#3
What’s more, education exercises our way of thinking which gives us the tool to view the world. A typical example is that students in major mathematic are considered to have better comprehensive and self-learning ability than other students. That’s because the process of learning math requires lots of comprehension and self-learning. Students need to thoroughly understand those severe abstract concept and theorem in textbook and be able to use them in other scenario, thus they think a lot and always do self-learning, giving them a powerful mind. So, we can conclude that education indeed set our minds free.
P#4
Lastly, through the process of education we would be attached to lots of people and get touched with many things that we haven’t met before, which gives us a broader view to the world and stimulate us to think more. Take myself as an example, after I enter the university I met many friends who are really excel and when I communicate with them I always receive many fresh idea, and their curiosity stimulates me to explore the fantastic field I am interested in. I would learn their way of dealing with things around them and my personal level is rising without awareness. So, the process of education will help set our minds free too.
P#5
In a word, in education we will gain more knowledge, exercise our brain and be stimulate by people and things we ran into, leading to a more open view of world and more flexible way of thinking. Therefore, I am greatly convinced that education tends to set our minds free but absolutely not restrict them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 307, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'excelled'.
Suggestion: excelled
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, may, really, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 33.0505617978 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2335.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 492.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74593495935 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62503049156 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483739837398 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 722.7 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.1696412041 60.3974514979 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.352941176 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9411764706 23.4991977007 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05882352941 5.21951772744 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.422058290633 0.243740707755 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158281055692 0.0831039109588 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.171607195449 0.0758088955206 226% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262416189599 0.150359130593 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.152423323083 0.0667264976115 228% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.1392134831 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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