Educational institutions definitely play an important part in developing and shaping a students’ future. So it of prime concern whether they should intervene on which fields of study a student is opting. I partially agree with the fact that those institutions should indeed help a student by discouraging them from choosing an area where they might not succeed in.
Students themselves are oftentimes quite confused themselves on which fields they should go and they either follow up with their friends or they follow what their parents tell them to do. However, this will be a bad choice because they might not succeed in it, most likely because they are not good at that field or they are not engrossed in it. The institution will have a better idea on which areas the student is excellent at, and advise them according to that. If this happens, then students are most likely on their path to success. For example if a student is good at maths and loves science, then obviously the institution would persuade him for science-related fields like engineering, computer science, etc, so if the students, for any reason, would be inclined to a field of study which is not related to science, then it is best that the academic body save them by dissuading them from this area. As success is the prime goal of many individuals on this planet, thereby by helping students choose their correct path, the institution is doing a rather magnanimous deed.
However, if success is not all that we cared about, then this would not be the right thing to do. In cases where a student does not care about success, but rather cares about which fields interest him and which he is passionate about, then it is of vital importance that he should not opt a subject area that does not interest him even though the educational body encourages him to do that. There are many unhappy people on this planet only because they don’t love what they do, and in fact around 80% of people actually do not love their job. So if a students’ goal is to stay happy and blissful then it is essential that they just choose what they love to do rather than trying to delve into an area which eventually might make them gloomy.
It is then better, that the educational institutions aid their students by letting them know which fields of studies might not make them succeed, however, they should also probe more on whether the student really is passionate for that area or are they just choosing it for success, and ultimately guide them towards contentment and not just towards success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 222, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
... study a student is opting. I partially agree with the fact that those institutions should indeed help a...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... area where they might not succeed in. Students themselves are oftentimes quite...
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Line 3, column 447, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[3]
Message: Verbs 'advise' and 'remind' are used with infinitive: 'to accord'.
Suggestion: to accord
...tudent is excellent at, and advise them according to that. If this happens, then students...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on is doing a rather magnanimous deed. However, if success is not all that we c...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ich eventually might make them gloomy. It is then better, that the educational ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, really, so, then, for example, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 33.0505617978 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2133.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 446.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78251121076 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57830765686 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45067264574 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 641.7 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.0933587041 60.3974514979 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.357142857 118.986275619 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8571428571 23.4991977007 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238323794911 0.243740707755 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.098270252783 0.0831039109588 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581279128726 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179608618198 0.150359130593 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499907193506 0.0667264976115 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 48.8420337079 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.04 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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