The letter uncovers the concerns of the store owners regarding the decline of customers in their area over the past two years. The proposed solution is to ban skateboarders in that area whom the store owners presume to be the culprit of their customers’decline. However certain questions need to be answered to fully understand whether or not this plan will actually improve the situation or not.
First of all, is the popularity gain of skateboard users and the decline of customers really proportional ? Just because they happened at the same area does not indicate that they are connected. It could be possible that there was a newly built skateboard area which slowly gained attention to all skateboarders, which resulted in the increase. It is unlikely that the increased number of skateboarders would preclude the arrival of customers in that area.The decrease in customers is probably due to another reason, for example, they might have found a better place to shop with better prices and better variety.
Secondly, before commencing the ban, we have to determine whether there are actually any new plaza nearby which could have started the gradual decrease of customers. It could be that Central Plaza’s items is too expensive for people, or that its items are of little variety, or it has outdated items not desired by people. So everyone started to go to the other one and hence the decrease.
Thirdly, the amount of litter and vandalism near the plaza could have left the customers unsatisfied and obligated them to go to another place to shop. Therefore, another plan could be to clean all the litter and repair the vandalism, and also to put warnings about sanctions on vandalism, so that this is prevented in the future. Hence, this is also an important issue that needs to be answered .
Finally, is banning skateboarding going to increase customers? It could actually be the quite opposite. It could be possible that the numbers of people currently shop also include the skateboarders, their relatives and their family, and so banning them would further decrease those numbers. Even worse, banning them might create hostility between the store owners and the skateboarders resulting in subsequent vandalism and a more dire situation than is.
Therefore, it is clear that the store owners should do a proper analysis and answer all these queries and come to the conclusion on whether banning skateboarders would have any significant or opposing effect.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, hence, however, if, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2092.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 406.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15270935961 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86607443891 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512315270936 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4723520248 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.222222222 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5555555556 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05555555556 5.21951772744 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153006095088 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.046283335929 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0441261021764 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0758705734503 0.150359130593 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347799285402 0.0667264976115 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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