Essay topic 29: Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Industrialization of human society, establishment of factors and fast growth of population have caused numerous effects on ecosystems and species survival. Thus, society is responsible for conserving the ecosystems and species as far as society’s activities have threatened the life of species as part of the ecosystem.
Firstly, ecosystem embodies various species and plants which are interdependent. If a part of this chain is missed, the other part will suffer as well. In other words, the extinction of one species may cause the extinction of others; therefore, the protection of one species will save the underlying life chain of the ecosystem. For instance, some birds predate fishes to supply their nutrition. Accordingly fishes are fed by under marine creatures, plants, etc. If the fishes expose to the verge of extinction, birds cannot survive either and this chain subsequently continues. In addition, many human activities are connected with the technology and industry improvement. To establish countless factories, humans have had to inevitably occupy some habitats of species. Hence, some species moved to various environments while environmental changes threatened their life by encountering predators or insufficient food and in some cases contaminated surrounding. Another example of this case is global warming which highly increased the earth temperature so that glaciers have already begun melting and polar bears and other species have lost their habitat and food supplies.
On the other hand, some may argue that conserving the endangered species requires various costly processes. First, the authorities must hire body of experts and environments to securitize the underlying reasons behind the extinction and the reliable conservation procedures. Large number of people should involve and monitor the saving progress to implementing the conservation plans. If such a protection plan is widely executed. Excessive expenses are required to cover all financial aspects of the plan. As a result, abandoning saving endangered species is reasonable.
In conclusion, society should conserve the ecosystem to save endangered species due to human activities like constructing factors, population growth, etc. The ecosystem is interconnected and loss in one area results in loss in other areas as well. However, the conservation plan will be financially burdensome.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Accordingly,
...edate fishes to supply their nutrition. Accordingly fishes are fed by under marine creature...
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Line 9, column 386, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...to implementing the conservation plans. If such a protection plan is widely execut...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in other words, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 33.0505617978 24% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2049.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 355.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.77183098592 5.05705443957 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16169546143 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549295774648 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 6.24550561798 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.0799126927 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5714285714 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9047619048 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.09523809524 5.21951772744 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199332637731 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597196965625 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641613908886 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131917161622 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0173535546728 0.0667264976115 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 48.8420337079 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.89 12.1639044944 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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