Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reaso

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Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

Some people hold the idea that young people should follow their own goals while others recommend them to choose goals which are considered worthy. However, the fact that choosing wise goals can help some people to success is undisputable, but pursuing goals which are set by the heart can also show a great outcome in the success of the person.

Nobody can describe what worthy is. Due to diverse beliefs and priorities of individuals, everybody has a valuable opinion. Others can tell you about their experiences, but they can never know what worthy in your life mean. There are people who believe an ideal is having good education and having the highest paid jobs in the society like lawyers, doctors or engineers. On the contrary, there are young people who want to be and artist or athletics or even enjoy occupations which are not paid considerably and the person is simply enjoying it. The society needs all types of careers, setting goals for jobs which are becoming a cliché in the society will not only harm the society, but also the individual who is doing it. The most valuable thing is not what brings you money, its what makes you happy.

The fact that passion is the key to success is inevitable. By having fondness to a specific field, the person will put the maximum effort in order to make it real. Being disinterested to a field only enhances depression and sometimes just quitting in the middle of the way. There have been people who spent so much money and most crucial, time on what they never wanted and as a consequence they never showed the expected outcome.

There are sometimes dreams that even the most experienced people couldn’t discern. There were people such as bill gates who had ideas which seemed not only unrealistic but also funny to most people. For sure many people told them that they are wasting their times and never knew what these people are following. After years, people like bill gates became the most valuable idols for the society. Holders of ideas which were once considered futile, became the symbol of wealth and success in the community.

In conclusion, for everyone their own belief and goal is considered worthy and people who have dreams want most of their life. nobody else can set a goal for someone else. Passion makes people to do their best in their career and education and some goals which might seem unyielding may contribute to the highest ideas of the society.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: it's; it is
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, while, in conclusion, such as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2033.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 422.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81753554502 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34185574137 2.79657885939 84% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492890995261 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2418185936 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8095238095 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0952380952 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7619047619 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150250991423 0.243740707755 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462536296901 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395127353864 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0825527362013 0.150359130593 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413573692152 0.0667264976115 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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