The following appeared in a health newsletter.
"A ten-year nationwide study of the effectiveness of wearing a helmet while bicycling indicates that ten years ago, approximately 35 percent of all bicyclists reported wearing helmets, whereas today that number is nearly 80 percent. Another study, however, suggests that during the same ten-year period, the number of accidents caused by bicycling has increased 200 percent. These results demonstrate that bicyclists feel safer because they are wearing helmets, and they take more risks as a result. Thus, there is clearly a call for the government to strive to reduce the number of serious injuries from bicycle accidents by launching an education program that concentrates on the factors other than helmet use that are necessary for bicycle safety."
Over the entire duration of 10 years, there are quite a few things that have changed drastically which may have led to the increase in accidents caused by bicycles. Even if the data doesn’t lie, it is not reasonable to make a conclusion, that bicyclists taking risks, is the only one factor which may have led to these numbers.
Over the time period there is an increasing concern for ecological thinking, waste reduction, sanitation, major sign of global warming have also triggered and influence the way people choose to travel and also general health concerns for fitness freaks. As a result, bicyclists have therefore increased in number altogether, so the study should take into consideration all the variables that have changed during the performance of this experiment. Maybe the increase in accidents might not even be a major problem of concern, but something obvious due to the increase in the number of bicyclists. So, had there been a study which showed the increase or decrease in bicyclists over the 10 years, there would’ve been a clarity, as to what conclusions to make.
The need for the government to strive and reduce accidents is definitely a good idea, and if at all effective, it would only have a good impact on the people. But instead of pouring all of the resources into an educational program on a problem which only has a probability of being extant, the rise in numbers must be analysed carefully before coming to any final conclusions. The rise in the number of people wearing helmets is in it of itself, an indicator that people are also concerned with the safety factor, or at least there are laws which require them to do so. Also there might be a probability of some outlier data points, where there are some rash bicyclists. But the way to devise a solution, to the numbers at hand, is to analyse the results from a wider perspective and various angles to make sure that the exact actual problem has been identified and targeted, so a more helpful and efficient solution can be crafted.
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...e are laws which require them to do so. Also there might be a probability of some ou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, therefore, as to, at least, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 33.0505617978 36% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1689.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 350.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82571428571 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7456964471 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528571428571 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.6875285355 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.545454545 118.986275619 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8181818182 23.4991977007 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72727272727 5.21951772744 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0623163855742 0.243740707755 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0256043397548 0.0831039109588 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0263635863686 0.0758088955206 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0409035773958 0.150359130593 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0123455778458 0.0667264976115 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.8420337079 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.33 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.7820224719 153% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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