The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend.
"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch
Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in
contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams'
revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that
averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell
faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four
months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took
only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you
should use Adams Realty."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the
argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and
what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In this argument, the author concludes that people should choose Adam Realty as their prior choice for selling house owing to its selling quickly and good prices. To support this conclusion, the author points that Adams has more real estate agents than Fitch and has less part-time workers. Moreover, Adams has a higher revenue and higher price of each house. In addition, according to author’s experience, Adams sell house faster than Fitch. However, the argument contains unjustifiable assumptions that might weaken the validity of the conclusion.
Firstly, it doesn’t make sense by comparing the number of real estate agents and part-time employees to conclude that Adams is better. Because we cannot define the success of a company by judging its scale, there are much company which has little real estate agents while has a great number of profit. Sometimes, little number of employee may means certain company has a much higher working efficiency. Moreover, the number of real estate agents cannot be representative of the scale of company. As we all know, much company nowadays has develop online service which save a lot of costing in offline working place while in the meantime improve the working efficiency.
Secondly, the stats showed in the argument may not be valid evidence to the assumption. Even though we know that Adam’s revenue is twice as high as Fitch’s, it doesn’t mean Adams had a better selling condition. Revenue contains lots of aspects and one company cannot only have one business. So the total number of revenue cannot truly reflect the revenue comes from house selling, maybe just because Fitch has less business but has higher house selling record thus leading to the difference between two company. In addition, average price of house selling is insignificant because larger house definitely will have a higher selling price. We must consider the average price of square meter of house. Also different region has different price, thus the comparing average house selling price is not importance. Moreover, the assumption based on the data of last year not this year which is not representative.
Last but not least, author made the argument by his own experience that selling quickness had difference between two company, while it is not solid evidence for the assumption. What comes first is the data is not that representative, author only use its own experience to draw the conclusion but not the data from all customers. Moreover, author compare the quickness of selling house between two different time spot, ten years ago and last year. Fitch may will definitely develop their selling process by last 10 years and we must compare the quickness of two company within one year. If author want to solid the assumption, he must enrich the data.
To sum up, the conclusion is not well-supported. In order to make his conclusion more
convincing, we must add or correct different points to the argument.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 544, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'developed'.
Suggestion: developed
... we all know, much company nowadays has develop online service which save a lot of cost...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 715, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...average price of square meter of house. Also different region has different price, t...
^^^^
Line 5, column 412, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'spot' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'spots'.
Suggestion: spots
...elling house between two different time spot, ten years ago and last year. Fitch may...
^^^^
Line 7, column 86, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed. In order to make his conclusion more convincing, we must add or correct diffe...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2490.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 483.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15527950311 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69413632153 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453416149068 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 776.7 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.0520450161 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.32 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72 5.21951772744 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137375191753 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.041687719995 0.0831039109588 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0541089158842 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0642217376181 0.150359130593 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651341230891 0.0667264976115 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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