Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful.
In contemporary society, much ink has been spilled on the topic that how to definite succeed of people. Some claims that only those who earn a great deal of money can be justified as a successful person. Such assertion, however, has been torn into pieces by others. As far as I am concerned, the statement that defining succeed by the number of money people earned is arbitrary and one-sided because it fails to take all related circumstance into consideration. We should analyze this statement comprehensively before we draw the final conclusion.
There is no denying fact that the amount of money one earn can be a leading factor that help others to recognize one as a successful person. I reckon it is because we are in a peace era which means those basic need like safety had been meet decades ago, the most common goal for almost everyone is to have a better quality of life. In other word, the better life a person chase, the more money he or she should earn. Consequently, people starts to regard money as a prior goal and those who have a great amount of money become model many people wants to mimic. That is why money can be a efficient tool for people to judge others and respect the rich. However, it cannot cover all the factors to definite a person and its weight isn't comparable to other factors clustering together.
Firstly, there are different judgement for different person defining their succeed. The standard also varies under different cultures and nations. There is a vivid example can prove the statement. WE cannot deny what Wang xijing, a great people in most Chinese people's view, contribute to society including donating to schools and helped more than 30 thousands poor students went go school, which in most citizen's eyes he is a successful person gained a lot of respect from others. In the other hand, we cannot regard him as a good business man because his company failed under his chaotic management. In this way, it is impossible to use the failure of his career to cover the glory he gained from citizens, which means he is a successful person.
Secondly, earning too much money can also be regarded as failure. To be specific, different people gain money in different ways. Some ways are protected by laws while others are beyond the boundaries set by laws, like gun dealing or drugs. Pablo, serving as the biggest drug dealer ever seen, is regarded as a total failure for almost every country except his mother land. When it was 1990's, his money equals to the income of 90% people in Columbia. We cannot deny his richness, but we cannot also deny his trading with Europe and North American, which leads to 300 million people suffer in the drugs and millions of police and politician died in his trading. Thus, he is terrible impact to other country making their people suffered and forcing economic stagnated. Even though he donate a lot of money to local people and government, he is definitely a failure rather than succeed.
In brief, based on the previous discussion, the issue is complex and needs a case by case analysis. We are not supposed to disregard those situations where the statement is unjustifiable. As a result, I cannot totally agree with this statement
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, i reckon, in brief, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2657.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 559.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75313059034 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86242540663 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54435280629 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515205724508 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 846.0 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8228049661 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8928571429 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9642857143 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.60714285714 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200264319941 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.056331034208 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0570208941576 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117277908279 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376951259485 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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