Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In this arguement the author concludes that the failure of graduated sutdents seeking jobs is due to the evaluation of professors. To support this conclusion, the author points out that in order to get highly paid, those professor begun to assign higher grades in their class leading to a fasle evaluation of students, which confound students who regard themselves as good as the grades reflect. moreover, the potential employers don't trust those inflated grates thus students cannot be successful at getting jobs. The author's arguement is problematic in several respects and fails to provide reliable evidence to prove the conclusion.
First of all, a threshold problem with the argument is that the evaluation system for students may be differnet in different university, thus it is neccesary to provide vaild evidence that proving the grading system for students are similar, becasue if those grades justification is different, we can not conclude that students from alpha university is better than those from omega university.
Second, the author fails to consider other factors that employers judge students. What we all know is that employers must consider several aspect of students to judge whether he or she is fit to the position and those factors are also have different power, which means that whether the grades is the only standard or the most important standard is to be test. In this way, I think author should provide sufffient evidence about the way employers judge students.
moreove, we must know if it's true that inflated grades are the main factor causing bad getting job performance for student from omega university. we must ensure the evidence that before the evaluation system started, student from omega have been as good as students in alpha. if omega's student isn't better than those from Aphla, it is not true that the false grades leading to the failure in finding jobs. also, the arugment lack the fact that stastic number that show different job finding condition between univeristies, which is necceary for drawing the point that graduates from omega did had a bad conditon in job hunting.
Last but no least, we do not know whether the evaluation policy is prevailed in omega university, because it is probably that not all professor care the evaluation from students and think it's subjective and not reflective. In the meanwhile, not all student are will to judge proferrosrs in such way, resulting the inflated grades only appears in a minor number. that the reason we need to know the fact that whether the evaluation system is prevailed.
To sum up, the arguer fails to substantiate his claim, because there are several other evidences need to be add to support his points.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In this arguement the author concludes that the failure of graduated sutdents seeking jobs is due to the evaluation of professors.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Error: sutdents Suggestion: students
Sentence: To support this conclusion, the author points out that in order to get highly paid, those professor begun to assign higher grades in their class leading to a fasle evaluation of students, which confound students who regard themselves as good as the grades reflect. moreover, the potential employers don't trust those inflated grates thus students cannot be successful at getting jobs.
Error: fasle Suggestion: fable
Sentence: The author's arguement is problematic in several respects and fails to provide reliable evidence to prove the conclusion.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: First of all, a threshold problem with the argument is that the evaluation system for students may be differnet in different university, thus it is neccesary to provide vaild evidence that proving the grading system for students are similar, becasue if those grades justification is different, we can not conclude that students from alpha university is better than those from omega university.
Error: vaild Suggestion: valid
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: becasue Suggestion: because
Error: neccesary Suggestion: necessary
Error: differnet Suggestion: different
Sentence: In this way, I think author should provide sufffient evidence about the way employers judge students.
Error: sufffient Suggestion: sufficient
Sentence: moreove, we must know if it's true that inflated grades are the main factor causing bad getting job performance for student from omega university. we must ensure the evidence that before the evaluation system started, student from omega have been as good as students in alpha. if omega's student isn't better than those from Aphla, it is not true that the false grades leading to the failure in finding jobs. also, the arugment lack the fact that stastic number that show different job finding
Error: isn Suggestion: ion
Error: stastic Suggestion: static
Error: arugment Suggestion: argument
Error: moreove Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: condition between univeristies, which is necceary for drawing the point that graduates from omega did had a bad conditon in job hunting.
Error: conditon Suggestion: condition
Error: necceary Suggestion: near
Error: univeristies Suggestion: universities
Sentence: In the meanwhile, not all student are will to judge proferrosrs in such way, resulting the inflated grades only appears in a minor number. that the reason we need to know the fact that whether the evaluation system is prevailed.
Error: proferrosrs Suggestion: professors
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 17 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 450 350
No. of Characters: 2225 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.606 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.944 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.547 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 131 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 37.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 22.047 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.391 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.728 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.191 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 216, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this professor' or 'those professors'?
Suggestion: this professor; those professors
...s out that in order to get highly paid, those professor begun to assign higher grades in their ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 397, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Moreover
...emselves as good as the grades reflect. moreover, the potential employers dont trust tho...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 431, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...lect. moreover, the potential employers dont trust those inflated grates thus studen...
^^^^
Line 3, column 131, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun aspect seems to be countable; consider using: 'several aspects'.
Suggestion: several aspects
...ll know is that employers must consider several aspect of students to judge whether he or she ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...the position and those factors are also have different power, which means that wheth...
^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Moreove
...bout the way employers judge students. moreove, we must know if its true that inflated...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 146, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...ance for student from omega university. we must ensure the evidence that before t...
^^
Line 4, column 173, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... university. we must ensure the evidence that before the evaluation system starte...
^^
Line 4, column 277, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...have been as good as students in alpha. if omegas student isnt better than those f...
^^
Line 4, column 295, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...as students in alpha. if omegas student isnt better than those from Aphla, it is not...
^^^^
Line 4, column 407, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...leading to the failure in finding jobs. also, the arugment lack the fact that stasti...
^^^^
Line 4, column 594, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...the point that graduates from omega did had a bad conditon in job hunting. Last bu...
^^^
Line 5, column 19, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...iton in job hunting. Last but no least, we do not know whether the evaluation po...
^^
Line 5, column 363, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: That
... grades only appears in a minor number. that the reason we need to know the fact tha...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, thus, while, i think, in fact, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2269.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 448.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06473214286 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61272392941 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46875 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.0256962406 57.8364921388 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.8125 119.503703932 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 23.324526521 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4375 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19758101433 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663680079821 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576750978202 0.0701772020484 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0984436783789 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056534480641 0.0628817314937 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 14.3799401198 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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