People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting

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People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement
and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position,

I partially agree with the statement because it fails to take all related circumstance into consideration. There are various reasons leading to human behavior, coming from inside or outside. Different environments cause different mood, which means multiple factors can result different behavior, but not only caused by forces coming from outside.

First of all, there is no denying fact that force can change human behavior. Like history event shows, there are many wars in the history and great amount of solders devoted into the event only because the order or protection. The reason why they cannot behavior as they wish is mainly due to the fact that force is so great that no one are able to obey it. The solders coming from those nation who wanted to attack other country are ordered to kill or attack, even they are reluctant to do it. Thus, as we can tell, those country which are under attack have to take their arms to protect other people, which is the only choice for the situation. That’s the circumstance that forces plays a more important role in human behavior.

However, according to the psychological theory, the factors lead to human behavior are various. The based one is force from outside and the weight between different factors also changes. We nowadays human take control of their leisure time and do whatever they want. Why we call it ‘leisure’ is mainly because that we enjoy the period of time by doing something we love, like playing video games or doing sports. Force is painful while own willingness is joyful. That’s why we call those time that we ourselves can freely control is leisure and that’s the most situation human being’s behavior is out of their own making.

When it comes to leisure time, we cannot neglect working time. Most people will reckon working behavior is out of force because everyone have to make a living by earning money. There also have a great number of people who enjoy working which comes from their own making. Some people who are in government apartment really want to help people and have a strong feeling of develop society. The reason contribute their working passion is their inner decision, not for money, not for better living quality, only want to helping people and make a better world. They work for their own decision.

To sum up, the statement that human behavior is largely due to forces is partially wrong and need a case by case analysis before draw the final conclusion.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 382, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this nation' or 'those nations'?
Suggestion: this nation; those nations
...ble to obey it. The solders coming from those nation who wanted to attack other country are ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 338, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...os; is mainly because that we enjoy the period of time by doing something we love, like playin...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, so, thus, while, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2064.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 421.0 441.139720559 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9026128266 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48836811932 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479809976247 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.2112576599 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8181818182 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1363636364 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.59090909091 5.70786347227 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182727018799 0.218282227539 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603567698482 0.0743258471296 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413589038471 0.0701772020484 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101011211913 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371686910366 0.0628817314937 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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