Do you agree or disagree people today spend too much time on personal enjoyment - doing things they like to do rather than things they should do.
Life of people is transforming at an alarming pace day by day. Every day new technologies are coming up, and world is progressing towards exploring every domain starting from breaking of invisible particles atoms into hundreds of smaller particles to research on existence of extraterrestrial life. In this process of transformation thinking and mentality of people has been influenced to a great extent by technology. It has made lives much easier by reducing the hardships of life changing the mind set of todays people. It has enabled to focus more on things that give temporary pleasure and complete tasks of our choice than doing things that actually matter in their life. I comply the argument that people today spend too much time on personal enjoyment - doing things they like to do rather than things they should do.
In today's world every thing is availible at a single click of mouse or tapping on the phone. It has affected the thinking ability of many individuals. Most people prefer an easy and comfortable life rather and avoid facing the hardships. Availiblility of every resource has reduced the craving for that resource and hence working hard to achieve it. For instance, many students in school dont like to study and avoid education. they prefer to get temporary carnal pleasures, enjoy outgoing with friends, addicted to social media and wish to have a good popularity which they consider by number of likes on their facebook, instagram pages. They are unaware that it is mandatory for them to focus on education rather than all these activities because acedemics will help them for overall personality development of a person and prepare him for all the hardships in life whereas earlier the life was very simple, the main focus was education and for recreation students used to go out and play which improved their health conditions also and now they have a well established career.
People also prefer to escape from the tasks assigned to them by procrastinating it and rather than enjoying with friends and watching various TV shows until the deadline of the task. When the deadline is very close, they panic and take a lot of stress which also degrades their health. Similar situation happened with my friend Akash who was working for Microsoft used to enjoy his life evrymoment and never used to do his work and in the end he was so much stressed and dinally ended up geting health problems.
In life it is important to enjoy but maintaing a balance in life is much more important. A proper balance between having fun and doing things we like and the things we should do which will lead to a healthy life. Things which we should so are inevitable things which we anyhow have to accomplish so its better to plan them accordingly along with enjoyment to have a successful life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
.... For instance, many students in school dont like to study and avoid education. they...
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Suggestion: They
...dont like to study and avoid education. they prefer to get temporary carnal pleasure...
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Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
...s earlier the life was very simple, the main focus was education and for recreation studen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, also, but, hence, if, so, well, whereas, for instance, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2333.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87056367432 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62678428115 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526096033403 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.5924001706 48.9658058833 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.789473684 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2105263158 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184993381689 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058939294427 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0914471993599 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115950870911 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0774255624393 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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