Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
When a child is born there's a sound of happiness all around the family and their relatives. Parents consider it one of their best moments when they hear the first cries of their child even though they have to sacrifice many things for that child. That happiness does not last long enough and begins to depend on the child's behavior towards parents. As the child grows up he learns to become independent and slowly the parent-child bond attenuates. Ultimately the child decides to be independent of their parents and leaves them alone which is the case with many parents in the world but from my perspective young adults should prefer to live with their families for a longer time. The reasons for my perspective are Personal and Financial.
Firstly, I personally believe young adults should prefer to live with their parents for a longer time and should always support them whenever needed. Parents Make many sacrifices for their children like initially when a child is born, parents sacrifice their freedom to be available for newly born baby, spent many night sleepless even though they have to go for work next day, if the child falls sick they leave all their work and take care of that child and make sure that child has adequate hospitality when sick, they try to fulfill every small demand of their child suppressing their personal needs. For instance, my friend Rohit wanted to buy a Play Station and his dad brought it to him on his birthday sacrificing his personal mobile phone which he needed to buy as he is a businessman and has many clients. Moreover, he traveled for 2-3 hours every day to go to the office.
Secondly Financial Reasons, Parents enroll the child in elementary school and finance their schooling. They even finance the higher education like graduation, post graduation and allow the child to choose any career avenue his wishes without putting any financial pressure on him. They even take us to travel where ever we want and supply all the luxuries to their child. They even give their child some pocket money which the child spends in his own ways on things he likes whereas parents don't have any pocket money to spend on their wishes. For example one of my brothers went to the US to complete his master's programme which is highly expensive, his dad didn't have enough money to send him but he took a loan to fulfill his wishes and his parents are paying up the loans.
Since parents do almost possible things for us and never ask for anything in return. The only thing they may expect is their child to be faithful, honest, take care of them and respect their parents in return. So keeping in mind my personal view and financial factors, I think young adults should be more responsible towards their parents and prefer to live with their families for a longer time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, whereas, for example, for instance, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2320.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 491.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7250509165 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30901188257 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476578411405 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 694.8 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.2595879111 48.9658058833 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.888888889 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2777777778 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314198330849 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120453830578 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126561342797 0.0737576698707 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238410542976 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0876312689255 0.0645574589148 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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