Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
When a child is born there's a sound of happieness all around the family and their relatives. Parents consider it one of their best moments when they hear the first cries of their child even thogh they have to sacrifice many things for that child. That happieness does not last long enough and begins to depend on child's behaviour towards parents. As the child grows up he learns to become independent and slowly the parent-child bond attenuates.Ultimately the child decides to be independent from their parents and leaves them alone which is the case with many parents in the world but from my perspective young adults should prefer to live with their families for a longer time. The reasons for my perspective are Personal and Financial.
Firstly, I personally believe young adults should prefer to live with their parents for a longer time and should always support them whenever needed. Parents Make many sacrifices for their childern like initially when a child is born, parents sacrifice their freedom to be availible for newly born baby, spent many night sleepless even though they have to go for work next day,if the child falls sick they leave all their work and take care of that child and make sure that child has adequate hospitality when sick, they try to fulfil every small demand of their child suppressing their personal needs. For instance my friend Rohit wanted to buy a Play Station and his dad brought it to him on his birthday sacrificing his personal mobile phone which he needed to buy as he is a businessman and has many clients. Moreover he travelled 2-3 hours everyday to go to office.
Secondly Financial Reasons, Parents enroll the child in elementary school and finance their schooling. They even finance the higher education like graduation, post graduation and allow child to choose any career avenue his wishes without putting any financial pressure on him. They even take us to travel where ever we want and supply all the luxuries to their child. They even give their child some pocket money which the child spends in his own ways on things he likes whereas parents dont have any pocket money to spent on their wishes. For example one of my brother went to US to complete his masters programme which is highly expensive, his dad didnt had enough money to send him but he took loan to fulfil his wishes and his parents are paying up the loans.
Since parents do almost possible things for us and never ask anything in return. The only thing they may expect is their child to be faithful, honest, take care of them and respect their parents in return. So keeping in mind my personal view and financial factors, I think young adults should be more responsible towards their parents and prefer to live with their families for a longer time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, whereas, for example, for instance, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2298.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77754677755 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40648778829 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484407484407 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 99.2972539231 48.9658058833 203% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 135.176470588 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2941176471 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17647058824 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315095753597 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117503057343 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120517632831 0.0737576698707 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238319381241 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0864158043036 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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