young people have more enjoyment in life than older people

Essay topics:

young people have more enjoyment in life than older people

It is a fact that life is a beautiful journey full of experiences full of full of positive and negative incidents. It depends on perception of individual to enjoy a moment or not irrespective of the age. Some people believe that younger generations have more fun and enjoyment in their lives as compared to their older generations. While other's do not comply with this belief. As far as I am concerned I agree with the former for three compelling reasons.

Firstly,with the advancement in technology and increased automation of all the work, leisure time of people has been considerably increased. While younger genrations prefer to spend their leisure time for enjoyment like going out with friends, watching movies, playing video games, going on vacations with ease, doing various adventures whereas the older generation is baffaled between living a life with and without technology. Since older people try to acquaint themselves with the technology, they are not left with much free time. For instance, a current generation 6 year old child knows to operate computers and laptops whereas older people still figure out how to operate.

Secondly,some older people have their traditional beliefs and are bound to them which restricts them in mordenising and enjoying.For instance,some thirty forty years before, going to honeymoon was considered a sin. Newly wed couples were not allowed to express their love in public and had to face many social restrictions. This was also applied to students, they could not go out with girls for movies or on vacation. Our older generation still holds this belief and are unable to enjoy their life to fullest.

Lastly. some older people tend to have many medical health restrictions which prevents them to enjoy the way they wish. Older people having cardiac problems are told to take less stress and exertion. They are unable to travel on long vacations without taking rest in between. They are ven told to avoid going to amusement parks or theatres with high sound. Also people many old people having diabetes are unable to eat sweets and icecreams even though they may be mouthwatering. For instance, My friend Rohit's Dad has some medical condtions due to which he is unable to visit Disneyland eventhough it was his dream and while he was young used to enjoy in every amusement park.

In conclusion, Older people are bound by the many restrictions of raditional beliefs, health conditions or are unable to cope up with growing technology which does not let them to enjoy to their fullest.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'full of'.
Suggestion: full of
...a beautiful journey full of experiences full of full of positive and negative incidents. It dep...
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...as compared to their older generations. While others do not comply with this belief. ...
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...for three compelling reasons. Firstly,with the advancement in technology and incre...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'child' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'children'.
Suggestion: children
...stance, a current generation 6 year old child knows to operate computers and laptops ...
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...enjoy their life to fullest. Lastly. some older people tend to have many medical ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ment parks or theatres with high sound. Also people many old people having diabetes ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, still, whereas, while, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2126.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0619047619 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71233848281 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545238095238 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.4203796574 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.3 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32855309027 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101072123759 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0925149297981 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188661405362 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428447379959 0.0645574589148 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24 Out of 30
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