The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of marketing at Dura-Sock, Inc.
"A recent study of our customers suggests that our company is wasting the money it spends on its patented Endure manufacturing process, which ensures that our socks are strong enough to last for two years. We have always advertised our use of the Endure process, but the new study shows that despite our socks' durability, our average customer actually purchases new Dura-Socks every three months. Furthermore, our customers surveyed in our largest market, northeastern United States cities, say that they most value Dura-Socks' stylish appearance and availability in many colors. These findings suggest that we can increase our profits by discontinuing use of the Endure manufacturing process."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the memo, the vice president of Dura-Sock stated that customers basically value their stylish appearance of their product rather that its longevity, in addition he suggested that they can enhance their profit by concerning with versatility of products not with the Endure manufacturing process later only ensures robust constriction of products but this conclusion is stated under some unwarranted assumptions, if these two evidence can be analyzed with justification mentioned bellow, are ensured by the institution then we may conclude the success.
Firstly, the average customers are usually prone to purchase new socks in every three months but why the do it? There is a possibility that the majority of the customers of this Inc. are professionally athlete, that’s why they need some products that can last long as their activities are heavier than general uses but these socks may loose its much strength within 3 month for such stress than regular. Consequently, they need to buy another. They don’t care the styles and other appearances actually. If this assumption could be justified with evidence then the Inc. brings no profit by protein products rather than long lasting ones.
Secondly, the survey is performed in of this Inc.’s one the largest market in a particular part of the nation and it says they prefer versatile colors and more stylists and insouciant to longevity. Is this true for other region as well where people use this Inc.’s socks? Perhaps, the customers of other location like or buy their product only for their long lasting services not for variety of styles. There may some possibility weather this phenomenon might be true, the president’s prediction may not hold water and the conclusion would be weaken dramatically.
In sum the above stated assumptions must be justified by proper evidence if this Inc. are really want to make some profits by discounting the Endure manufacturing process that only ensures longevity not versatility, otherwise this argument would be fallen in doubt.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 265, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...g with versatility of products not with the Endure manufacturing process later only ensure...
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Line 3, column 102, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...new socks in every three months but why the do it? There is a possibility that the maj...
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Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...r than general uses but these socks may loose its much strength within 3 month for su...
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Line 3, column 374, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...ks may loose its much strength within 3 month for such stress than regular. Consequen...
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Line 3, column 514, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... styles and other appearances actually. If this assumption could be justified with...
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Line 7, column 98, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'wanted'.
Suggestion: wanted
...proper evidence if this Inc. are really want to make some profits by discounting the...
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Line 7, column 139, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ant to make some profits by discounting the Endure manufacturing process that only ensures...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, well, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 58.6224719101 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 326.0 442.535393258 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31288343558 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89231760842 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564417177914 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 126.267209375 60.3974514979 209% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 123.714285714 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2857142857 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64285714286 5.21951772744 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125676307507 0.243740707755 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0422252243564 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0370097696664 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0842088552906 0.150359130593 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356791481831 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 11.8971910112 248% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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