The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station. Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local businesses that used to advertise during our late-night news program have just canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level."
In the memorandum the television station manager uses many unstated assumptions to conclude that they have to devote more time to weather and local news and he also states that the local business that advertises the coverage of their channel had cancelled the contract, he did not mention the reason for cancellation of contract addition to this he mentions the complaint calls received from the viewers.
Firstly, The manager wants to devote more time to local news and weather based on a few complaint calls received from viewers. statistically, he did not provide us with the number of complaint calls he received from the viewers which could mean he could have received 5 or 8 or more calls on the particular issue. if he changes the content time of the national news he could get more complaints on this particular issue.
In addition to this, he mentions the local business that advertises their late-night shows cancelled the advertising contract. reason for this cancellation is not presented. The company could have been shutting down or the company advertising policy could have been changed, In this new policy the television station might not meet its standards. So, if he could state with a particular statement on why the company cancelled the contract we would reason with it.
The manager concludes based on some unstated assumptions and statistics wants to devote more time to the local news and weather .this could result in more loss in viewers. if he wants to devote more time to these he could have given more evidence and statistics instead of some unreason assumptions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 128, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Statistically
... complaint calls received from viewers. statistically, he did not provide us with the number ...
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Line 3, column 315, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... or more calls on the particular issue. if he changes the content time of the nati...
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Line 3, column 315, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... or more calls on the particular issue. if he changes the content time of the nati...
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Line 5, column 128, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Reason
...ows cancelled the advertising contract. reason for this cancellation is not presented....
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Line 7, column 128, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... more time to the local news and weather .this could result in more loss in viewer...
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Line 7, column 173, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...s could result in more loss in viewers. if he wants to devote more time to these h...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, so, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 19.5258426966 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 58.6224719101 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1338.0 2235.4752809 60% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 266.0 442.535393258 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03007518797 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.55969084622 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67813807337 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 215.323595506 52% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421052631579 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 409.5 704.065955056 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 90.3803075897 60.3974514979 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.8 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 10.2758426966 19% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230610258998 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119284624596 0.0831039109588 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0967415984731 0.0758088955206 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163438231844 0.150359130593 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544716696666 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 100.480337079 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.8971910112 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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