Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position

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Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.

it is understood that eradication of wilderness, for example: deforestation or
hunting of animals can sometimes be the inevitable by product of the development of
a nation. However, given the recent situation of the climate, and nature in general,
I agree with the statement nations should pass laws in order to preserve any remaining
wilderness in their natural state.

A reader may ask, Why? there are several answers. First and foremost, the
existence of rare and nearly extinct species. Whenever trees are cut down in
order to provide lumber or fuel, or when people hunt too much for food or sport
countless animal and mammal species can be killed or driven away. Because there
is no ecosystem to derive its food from, or there are no living spaces for such
species. there have been several instances where man-made factors have led to
extensive outward migration or extinction of species. For example, when Poachers
well allowed to hunt freely in the savannah which led to the severe depletion of
tiger population in Africa.

The second reason is that by not protecting wilderness, companies and other similar
entities may be tempted clear out an entire forest. now, people may argue that
the space is needed to build industries and homes for expanding the population. The
Rebuttal to this argument is that The disadvantages far outweigh the advantages
in this case. If trees were cleared out, the roots of the trees which are left over
would no longer hold the soil together. Near riverlands, the soil may be washed away
by the river and be contaminated, or the deposition of soil at the riverbanks
may cause floods, as is the case in India. On hillsides and mountains, the
lack of trees may cause landslides and avalanches. On the other hand,
building infrastructure upon cleared out lands may lead to more man made
pollution. which would not only harm wildlife but also us humans as well.

And my third point is: wilderness areas can provide a huge source of tourism revenue.
Certain countries, especially countries in asia, rely on the revenue generated
by wildlife tourism to run economies. now, clearing out such area could possibly
reduce such revenue on a considerable scale. now, it can be argued that the
development that follows may cover and exceed tourism revenues. The answer to this is,
there is no guarantee that the development would guarantee the cover-up of such
lossess, and thus there would be no such problems. The ability of the development
may be affected by various factors.

Therefore, and considering both sides of the arguement, I believe that state laws
should enact laws that protect the wilderness. As I have shown with the aforementioned
arguements, nations would, quite certainly, benefit from the protection of the
wilderness.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, third, thus, well, for example, in general, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2381.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 461.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16485900217 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75222855583 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561822125813 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 720.9 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.3640588506 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.24 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.44 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 36.0 4.97078651685 724% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186198768219 0.243740707755 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.044196162203 0.0831039109588 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528032291833 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0425484584718 0.150359130593 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497980935104 0.0667264976115 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 100.480337079 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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