Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument claims that woven baskets found within the vicinity of a prehistoric village, Palea, belong to that particular village. It goes on to counteract the statement through a form of reasoning to support that baskets were in fact not uniquely Palean, however this conclusion is doubtful due to some major flaws in the logic and coherence of the evidence provided.
The baskets were initially claimed to be solely Palean, by the author, as they were found within the Palean village radius. This evidence is based on thin ice as it is not clear the scope of this proximity to the actual village. The sample obtained may not have been representative of the village, but may have been from an external source. Amongst the many possibilities, travellers may have been crossing the terrain and left behind the basket. Furthermore, a river source/stream may have deposited the sample from it's origin. Without further evidence, it is impossible to determine the origin of the basket. If research were conducted in the Palean village itself to determine any similar remnants of baskets, we would be one step closer to finding out if the basket belonged there.
Additionally, the author implies that no boats were found till date and so the Paleans could not have crossed the river and deposited the basket in Lithos. If this were based on solid evidence, then this would be true. However, lack of presence does not mean non existence. Paleans could or could not have had boats in the past, but there is no such way to determine this unless vessels were found within the village. To support this claim better, specific work needs to be done in search of water vessels of any kind. This would give an idea of the capability of the Palean people to cross the river. It might have been possible that the people of Lithos may have crossed the river and thus the basket's location in Lithos is explained. Thus, additional research should be done in Lithos of the same kind as in Palea to determine any water vessel remains.
It is important to note that is set in prehistoric times and therefore it is likely that the topography of the land was different. The river source might have been narrow and shallow and it could have been possible to cross by foot. Further evidence can be collected by studying prehistoric maps and judging from them whether the river was ever a barrier for the Palea/Lithos people. Connections between the two villages should be studied i.e. trade, route for travellers etc. which might explain the reason of the same form of baskets in two different locations.
To conclude that the baskets were not Palean seems premature and misplaced. Most likely, other courses of action outlined above will need to be taken to verify the origins of the woven basket. This can be primarily done through extensive research in the Palean and Lithos villages and once more evidence is presented, the conclusion can be clear, coherent and rigid.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 507 350
No. of Characters: 2395 1500
No. of Different Words: 226 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.745 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.724 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.385 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 172 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.125 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.061 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.298 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.448 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 15, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'conclude'.
Suggestion: conclude
The arguments concludes that the presumably known palean basket...
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Line 1, column 166, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...hout bringing enough evidence to light. he misses out on important evidences which...
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Line 3, column 170, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...ore believed to be made by the paleans. there is no firm evidence that points to the ...
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Line 3, column 270, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...askets were made by the paleans or not. if the paleans weaved those then where did...
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Line 3, column 337, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Was
... then where did they weave the baskets? was there a workshop? How many craftsmen we...
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Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'misses identifying'.
Suggestion: misses identifying
...e of the basket in lithos. The argument misses to identify the source of the basket and leaves a g...
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Line 5, column 373, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Where
...e basket was produced in lithos itself? where this a result of trading with palea or ...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...if found to be against the argument. Moreover it is a case of just one basket being f...
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Line 7, column 292, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...story and we are just finding it there. this is discovery needs to be investigated f...
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Line 9, column 156, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...e crossed only with the help of a boat. he further states that the no boats were f...
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Line 9, column 304, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
...iver were not connected and hence there werent any trade routes. this point to another...
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Line 9, column 329, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...nd hence there werent any trade routes. this point to another hole in the argument, ...
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Line 9, column 446, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
... the efforts to find the missing boats. he also assumes that crossing the river ca...
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Line 9, column 524, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...r can only be done using the boats. May be the paleans had a different mode of tra...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
... of transport between the two cities. also geographical evidence of the river bein...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: also,
... of transport between the two cities. also geographical evidence of the river bein...
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Line 10, column 167, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...n of less depth or in those times there wouldnt have been a brim river, and later in hi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, lastly, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2323.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 497.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67404426559 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36003581244 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454728370221 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.3254620664 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.9642857143 119.503703932 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.75 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.82142857143 5.70786347227 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.67664670659 321% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179706886399 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0474625544398 0.0743258471296 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496759568301 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0912536375802 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362677134597 0.0628817314937 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 14.3799401198 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 12.5979740519 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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