Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Formal education means the path that is created by the education system and experts considering welfare of all in one society. But formal education might not be the exact thing a society needs. Sometimes, out of the box thinking can help a society to flourish even save it from utter destruction. The formal education might not be the best for one person or society for three reasons.
Firstly, a student’s personal interest is very likely to be the most important thing to be considered. One can’t deny that the personal interest plays a vital role in his/her future. If a person does a thing from his/her interest, weather it is study or job, he/she likely to give 100% of his/her effort. But studying a subject that is way beyond of his/her interest, might not be as effective as the previous one.
Secondly, in formal study system, there is no level playing field. A person’s intelligence can’t be judged by a mare exam or a subject knowledge. If one has to uphold his intelligence, he/she has to be provided with proper chance and guidance. For instant, if a fish is asked to climb a tree, it will feel that it is nothing but a garbage in the system. But the fish has the potential to do well in swimming unlike the monkey who might be the best in tree climbing.
Thirdly, form history, any creative people weather it is Einstein or Leonardo da Vinci, Formal education has failed to deliver the best man for any exact purpose. It was the personal agenda of these legendary person who fought against the formal education system and society to get success in life. Apart from a few examples like Alexander Flaming, every intellectual person has rejected the formal education system and made out of history by himself/herself.
There might have evidence of failure without formal education as the out of the box study might let towards unemployment, but one’s solo goal might not be to get a job and live on doing nothing. A person should not compromise his/her success with his/her interest as he/she has to live with it, not the society nor the pioneers of the education system. So for the instance, I mostly agree with that formal education restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 125, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'subject knowledge'.
Suggestion: subject knowledge
...gence can’t be judged by a mare exam or a subject knowledge. If one has to uphold his intelligence,...
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Line 3, column 329, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'garbage'.
Suggestion: garbage
...ee, it will feel that it is nothing but a garbage in the system. But the fish has the pot...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, apart from, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 387.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73643410853 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60569172439 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496124031008 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.7733196342 60.3974514979 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.4736842105 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3684210526 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52631578947 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116752864684 0.243740707755 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0469616197114 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0836044136372 0.0758088955206 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0770222617341 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0671160227144 0.0667264976115 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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