People are given more time for personal enjoyment in the present than in the past.Give a view on that.
The topic at hand today about the time speding on presonal enjoyment be persons in the past and present. There are several crucial points on both sides of these arguments. Based on the points, I strongly disagree that people are speding too much time on personal enjoyment than before. The key points on this are explained below.
Firstly, due to the technological advancements, life has become a lot more easier. Human work is getting reduced by time. It is a matter of great achievement. These advancement is giving people time for personl uses. But a person with greater desire is using it not only for enjoyment but also for development. For example, a student who used to make presentations on paper are now making it on computers. This leads to time saving by which he/she can give that time to learn many things. Yes some might use it for personal enjoyment but a person with a desire to achieve big is surely using it properly. Not everybody is on the same point.
Secondly, if perosnal enjoyment includes spending quality time with family then anybody should not have a problem with that. If a person is working like a robot, he/she might get detached from society. This will lead to several physical and mental problems. Researchers found that, a person spending quality time with family will deliver more and efficient work than a person with no or less family interaction. This personal space can not be considered as useless enjoyment as it is very essential for a person.
Thridly, there are new forms of enjoyments now. This is also a result of mordern technology. Living in the world, one can not deny the existence of these forms. Surely these are making a person to spend more time on enjoyment but these are undeniable things. To live with all one has to stay on the loop. Besides all the innovations are related to each other. For example mordern TV can be used as monitors. So a working person who knows how to operate TV surely will know the basics of monitor which is used in job. Hence, the technology gives a position to get used with mordern technology as a form of enjoyment.
Fourthly, wars fought arond the world are less now a days. Thses gives people time for enjoyment. One will surely agree that personal enjoyments are better than bloody wars.If a person gives time on enjoyment rather than war, this should be good for society and world.
One might argue about laziness of peoples. But the thing is that lazy people do exist in huge amount all over the world in every period of time. They will be lazy no matter what is the situation. These people should not be taken to account for this particular type of comparison.
Hence in the final it is evident that people are not giving much time on personal enjoyment. It is the facilities which has been upgraded regarding the scenerio. And the perons who want to achieve bigger, working hard no matter what is the situation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 71, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...cal advancements, life has become a lot more easier. Human work is getting reduced by time....
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Line 2, column 159, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this advancement' or 'These advancements'?
Suggestion: This advancement; These advancements
...e. It is a matter of great achievement. These advancement is giving people time for personl uses....
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Line 3, column 381, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...e and efficient work than a person with no or less family interaction. This person...
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Line 5, column 48, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...y, wars fought arond the world are less now a days. Thses gives people time for enjoyment....
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Line 5, column 52, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...ars fought arond the world are less now a days. Thses gives people time for enjoyment....
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Line 5, column 173, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
... enjoyments are better than bloody wars.If a person gives time on enjoyment rather...
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Line 6, column 129, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...huge amount all over the world in every period of time. They will be lazy no matter what is th...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...or this particular type of comparison. Hence in the final it is evident that people ...
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Line 7, column 251, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g hard no matter what is the situation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, hence, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 15.1003584229 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2399.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 513.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67641325536 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47649292078 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471734892788 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 776.7 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 37.0 20.6003584229 180% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7020549411 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.8378378378 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.8648648649 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.81081081081 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406070556542 0.236089414692 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.091409415398 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100529989211 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213472272791 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0945854644113 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 11.7677419355 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.27 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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