Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Formal education depletes the cognitive intelligence of the person. Whether it is in the school or the corporate world, a fixed set of curriculum does not help enhance the person's analytical thinking. Though formal education decreases the capability to understand out-of-the-box methods, it can help a person proceed in a guided way.
In schools, students start to learn from a fixed set of books. The text, which is written in the chapters, only gives a basic overview of the topic under question. In today's era, the teachers have made themselves dependent on the books, and therefore, they do not bother to guide the students to approach the same topic with different thinking strategies. Similarly, in the corporate world, the managers want their employees to follow a set of points, given the requirements specification provided by the company's client, to build a product. Sometimes the point is so specific that they circumscribe the employees to think of other solutions to the problem they are trying to solve. Therefore, this kind of monotonous practice in schools and offices restrains the thinking capability of the students and working professionals, respectively.
Throughout history, formal education has always stymied the person to think of other possibilities of a situation. For example, all the soldiers, who had participated in the wars, were trained using a fixed set of instructions. They were only allowed to choose a fixed set of melee weapons, and they were only trained in some specific moves to defend and kill their enemies. Moreover, the strategies which were made to win a war are more or less the same as formal education. Only the King of the city decides the approach of soldiers to attack in the war. They have only a fixed set of strategies, which become obsolete over time, to be followed during the battle. Therefore, this fixed set of goals and ideas, which become obsolete over time, have killed many soldiers, thereby signifies that formal education plays an essential role in restraining the person's thinking capability.
Though formal education has its degrading effects on the person's cognitive thinking capability, it can help irresolute students and employees. Some of the students cannot decide what they are going to study. A fixed set of homework can guide them to what to achieve in the next few hours. In addition to guidance, formal education can also help students to build their interests in specific fields. Later they can try to dig deeper into the particular subject and enhance their knowledge about that subject. Similarly, the employees who do not have any idea about a particular technology can benefit from its rich documentation source. They can certainly learn the basics from the knowledge transfer, a technique used in the corporate world to explicate the ideas about a concept from an employee to his/her colleagues, and can undoubtedly begin working in that field. Hence, formal education can give a brief direction to the person about how to begin working in a particular field.
The thinking capability can only be enhanced if the person is given an opportunity to think analytically. Bookish knowledge and a fixed set of bullet points always hinder the cognitive thinking of a person. Therefore, the person must be exposed to the work that can help them not only to think in goal oriented setting but also make them feel that they have really fathom something different from the usual.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 160, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'help'
Suggestion: help
...rld, a fixed set of curriculum does not helps to enhance the analytical thinking of t...
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Line 1, column 343, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a guided way" with adverb for "guided"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ethods, it can help a person to proceed in a guided way. In schools, students start to learn...
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Line 7, column 146, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
... the irresolute students and employees. Some of the students cannot decided what they are g...
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Line 9, column 370, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'fathomed'.
Suggestion: fathomed
...so make them feel that they have really fathom something different from the usual.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, for example, in addition, kind of, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 92.0 58.6224719101 157% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2943.0 2235.4752809 132% => OK
No of words: 582.0 442.535393258 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05670103093 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91168771031 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79312590054 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450171821306 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 919.8 704.065955056 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5480873132 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5555555556 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77777777778 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0970422629568 0.243740707755 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0334905815661 0.0831039109588 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0261823524397 0.0758088955206 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0618805450804 0.150359130593 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0240847975047 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 100.480337079 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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