Some people believe that traveling to and living in numerous places increases one s ability to relate and connect to other people Others believe that this ability is better cultivated by living in one place and developing a deep understanding of that comm

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Some people believe that traveling to and living in numerous places increases one’s ability to relate and connect to other people. Others believe that this ability is better cultivated by living in one place and developing a deep understanding of that community.

Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.

Sojourning to different places enhances the person's ability to grasp and commiserate with different communities. Living in different places unquestionably exposes the person to variegated cultures. Moreover, the disparate environments ranging from very cold weather cities to warmer climate places also expand the understanding of a person to relate the terminologies used in various societies. However, digging deeper about a community or a culture will always require the person to stay longer and spend more time with the populace of the particular society. Often time, the investigator, who wants to understand a community, will fall in love with the culture of the indigenous people and write poems and stories to explicate the progeny about the culture.

The people, who travel to different places around the globe, have a higher chance to sympathize with different societies. For instance, a traveler residing in Africa can easily relate the tribulations of the native population with other countries' population. Therefore, after moving from Africa to India, they can understand the problems faced by slum areas present in India. The travelers can also help different societies by providing them the solutions to their problems. It is very likely that they have seen the problems which are more or less the same in other countries. Therefore, they will also have a deeper understanding of how others have solved their problems. Consequently, they can become the intermediary between two different societies and can explicate solutions to the tribulations.

Traveling also allows them to discover eclectic cultures across the continents. If a traveler is staying in India, they will know that Indian food is consumed using hand and not using any sophisticated tool, for instance, a spoon. They will also understand the importance of religion in an Indian community. Once they shift to other countries such as Egypt, they can easily relate that the people in different continents respect their religion. In Egypt, if they see a community that eats food using hand, they will quickly adapt to that eating setting because they are already familiar with this habit in India.

Sometimes, travelers are affected deeply by the situations of a community, and therefore, they get too serious and become a part of that society. For instance, during the time of British colonization in Africa, several poets from England traveled to African colonies and stayed there forever. The writers connected with African citizens so deeply that they started writing against the British's tyranny over them. The poets did not want the African people to go through all the torture. The authors wanted to stay in Africa for a longer duration to fight for the cause of Africans.

Being peripatetic and traveling to a wide range of places will enhance the cognitive capability to understand the various cultures across the world. They are the only ones who will deeply understand the problems faced by different societies. Moreover, they will also know how one community has got rid of those problems, and hence, these travelers can provide the details of solutions to other nation's governments. However, to understand a community better, one can also make that community their home. Making a society as their denizen, travelers can tell the stories about a particular community to the whole world, which can undoubtedly solve a gamut of problems faced by others.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 45, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...urning to different places enhances the persons ability to grasp and commiserate with d...
Line 3, column 238, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
...ons of the native population with other countries population. Therefore, after moving fro...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, such as, more or less

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2417.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 453.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33554083885 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83961758293 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476821192053 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 773.1 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5849451134 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.863636364 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5909090909 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163175154156 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0554591664275 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366261436296 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103444140312 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027497898191 0.0667264976115 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.

Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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