Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing and su

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Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

Education is not only a requirement but also the right of each and every child.It doesn't only teaches them to read and write but also helps in development of their character.The statement states that formal education tends to tends to restrain our mind rather than set it free.However, I don't agree to it for a number of numerous reasons.
Formal education is the very essence of the Educational institution.With this approach only,the world has produced a number of laureates and nobles working in different fields and exploring new possiblities to enhance their field.This universal schooling approach which starts from pre school to high school and then to college doesn't restrain their mind but help grow their mind. This form of education teaches the students to develop the concept of thinking without which they won't be open to new possibilities and ideas.Wether it be a musician ,doctor or actor, everyone goes through this process.If this type education would have restrained their mind and spirit, Elton John wouldn't be a famous singer or Sachin Tendulkar a marvelous crickter.Formal Education didn't restrict them rather helped them to identify their true potential.
Even if some unconventional route were to be taken for education, it still would have captured some essence of formal education.In whichever way a kid is taught, the beginning remains the same.He has to learn to read & write, do assignments and study various subjects.Home schooling, which is practiced quite a lot these employs different method of schooling.The child rather than going to school is taught at home by a his/her parents.Even This form of schooling also follow on the footsteps of formal education with the child studying different subject,doing assigments etc.
In Recapitulation, Every form of education is in some way binded to roots of formal Education.Hence,it would be wrong to think that it bind us.In fact 'Formal Education' rather set us free

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, still, then, as to, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1634.0 2235.4752809 73% => OK
No of words: 311.0 442.535393258 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2540192926 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0931994717 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578778135048 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 704.065955056 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.2370786517 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 62.0 23.0359550562 269% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 129.380987784 60.3974514979 214% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 326.8 118.986275619 275% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 62.2 23.4991977007 265% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.4 5.21951772744 238% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 34.0 7.80617977528 436% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229812862874 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133783025768 0.0831039109588 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621101867553 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148131678013 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650665422288 0.0667264976115 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 34.4 14.1392134831 243% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 8.55 48.8420337079 18% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.92365168539 201% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 27.5 12.1743820225 226% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.06 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.72 8.38706741573 128% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 30.5 11.8971910112 256% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 26.8 11.2143820225 239% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 11.7820224719 263% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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