Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The speaker asserts that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free. I mostly agree with this assertion for some reasons.
First of all, In formal education it gives us theories, facts which we have to admit. We don't get the opportunity to explore in that area. We have to be confined in the topics and syllabuses that our institution provides us. One can not choose the subject of his choice due to this restrictions in our education system.
Secondly, Formal education system is not interactive. So students can not express their thoughts about a specific topic. Suppose a meritorious student has some questions about a topic of science, sometimes the teachers are not able to answer those questions due to time and resource shortage. So, he will be demotivated to learn further about that topic. Thus it will restrain his spirit on science and topics will not be clear to him. And with a perfunctory idea about a topic no one can prosper in the long run.
Again, Formal education does not help one to choose the career path. Because there is a lack of courses which helps students to be ready for the future world. If someone has to learn about the job market, he needs to communicate with different persons from different sectors. If our education system gives us proper knowledge about the job market, It would be easier for students to choose the right track at an early age.
In sum, It can be said in order to set our mind and spirit free, formal education process should be changed by the authority to make the process more interactive .
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 90, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ories, facts which we have to admit. We dont get the opportunity to explore in that ...
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Line 3, column 278, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...choose the subject of his choice due to this restrictions in our education system. ...
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Line 5, column 356, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ated to learn further about that topic. Thus it will restrain his spirit on science ...
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Line 9, column 162, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ity to make the process more interactive .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, secondly, so, thus, as to, of course, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1323.0 2235.4752809 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 279.0 442.535393258 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74193548387 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49527870514 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 215.323595506 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559139784946 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 704.065955056 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3348517719 60.3974514979 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.8235294118 118.986275619 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4117647059 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05882352941 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186378204927 0.243740707755 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654998793887 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828307475154 0.0758088955206 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131592101825 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0988334766606 0.0667264976115 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 14.1392134831 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 100.480337079 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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