Governments officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reason

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Governments officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

I generally agree that government officials should take their own judgements into account when making critical decisions. However, I think it is equally important to consider people's opinions with an appropriate degree of doubt since people's perspectives may not represent the best interest of the majority. Therefore, a more precise prompt that I will agree is that the government officials should find the balance to couple the professional judgements with peoples' will to meet the best interest of the mass.

To begin with, one important reason that the government officials are elected is that people believe they have the profession and the knowledge in dealing with certain domain of the issues. For example, when Tsai Ying-Wen, Taiwan's current president, has been elected, the major reason is that people believe that she is capable of taking care of the challenge between Taiwan and China. Also, people feel comfortable to count on her judgement in terms of sensitive international affairs. Therefore, under the democratic context, the government officials have the responsibilities to pave the way that fits with the expectations as well as the best interest of the citizens. Just like what Miss Tsai has done and makes her win the presidential election again.

However, the emphasis of the government officials' profession and judgements doesn't undermine the equal importance of listening to people's will. In other words, the problem is not to carry out people's will. Instead, it is to "unquestioningly" realize people's will in order to gain the sequential success of election. For instance, under the global pandemic, it is challenging to make a decision that is welcomed by the citizens. Most of the people would not like to be locked down or wear masks all the time. However, even knowing that the decision of quarantine will against people's will, it is still important to impose this policy to stop the spread of the virus. If the government officials carry out people's will undoubtedly and did not strictly conduct the social distance policy, then the result will be numerous death, just like what we have seen in certain countries.

In conclusion, society is evolving all the time, so the better way to achieve political decisions that can benefit the majority is to consider officials' own judgement as well as people's will to try their best to find out the solutions that are formed by the wisdom of whole society.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 77, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ent officials profession and judgements doesnt undermine the equal importance of liste...
Line 5, column 131, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people the equal importance of listening to peoples will. In other words, the problem is no...
Line 5, column 386, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'making'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: making
... the global pandemic, it is challenging to make a decision that is welcomed by the citi...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as well as, in other words, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2054.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 398.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1608040201 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95175554312 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517587939698 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.4531058778 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.375 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.875 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.375 5.21951772744 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242652608059 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841150470733 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555601606944 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148753724252 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364899342522 0.0667264976115 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.

Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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