Governments should focus on solving the immediate problems of today rather than on trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Some people might think that governments should focus on solving the anticipated problems of the future rather than focusing on the immediate problems. I disagree with them because the current one is more important than the anticipated one since future can exist when the present exists.
Admittedly, some people think that government needs to focus on the future problems that can be expected because by preventing those problems or solving those problems earlier, we can give a nicer society to our children. Abraham Lincoln is the one who tried to give future people better society. He tried to abolish the law of slavery to make a better country. Since he is a white man, not a black, he doesn’t have any negative impact because of slavery, but because of his thought, every people should be equal, he tried to ban the slavery, and he achieved it, so that he could give better lives to people who are suffered from slavery and will be suffered from slavery.
However, I think that country should try to solve the current problems first, rather than solve the anticipated problems. This is because the present is the main thing that can give significant impact on the future, so if the current problems leave unsolved, it can cause more serious problems in the future. Franklin D. Roosevelt is the one who tried to solve the current problems at that time, the Great Depression and the World War II. During his president period, he focused on the current problems that can be more serious in the future when just left unsolved. He tried to solve the current problem, the Great Depression, so he started Fireside to listen the nationers’ voice directly to reflect their difficulties on the country. As a result, he made efforts to restore the economy when the Great Depression started, and he tried to protect the nationers during WWII. If he does not focus on solving the current problems, the speed of economy normalization would be slower that can give a crucial impact on American’s life, and the number of war victims could be increases compared to attention on solving the current problems. Thus, the government should focus on the present first rather than the future.
In conclusion, I think country needs to give a point on the current problems more than the future one because the future is the result of the present. The governments should keep a close eye on their nationers’ lives so that they can provide better society to them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, thus, i think, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2037.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 420.0 442.535393258 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53780821213 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.416666666667 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 627.3 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.2125819916 60.3974514979 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.3125 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.25 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257804578336 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112379425755 0.0831039109588 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.098238512803 0.0758088955206 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192535229748 0.150359130593 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0827531318293 0.0667264976115 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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