Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
The issue of comparing arts with military is a controversial one as both serves different requirement. Military for a nation is its basic requirement from defending itself from militant and invasion/infiltration from other nations. While arts is not a basic requirement but a daily part and parcel of life and it can be taken care by individuals without much support or financial help from governments. Both Military and Arts have its importance in a society but due to above stated reason I will be more inclined towards government spending much more on military as compared to arts.
Firstly, as stated above Military is the basic requirement for any nation as it helps in keeping terror organizations in control and keeping borders of countries safe from infiltration/invasion.Due to a strong military power of a nation and our soldiers who are guarding our borders and keeping us safe from any militant group, we are able to live a normal day to day life happily. This sense of normalcy helps a nation to grow and flourish and became a developed nation. In this situation its pretty obvious that a government should spend more on Military than on Arts.
Secondly, its a very important requirement to have a strong military power to keep militant activities in control to prove itself as a stable nation. This not only help in overall growth of a nation but also attract foreign investment by good bilateral ties with all nations and also help in flourishing in sports and other nation building activities. In recent years we have observed a lot of terror activities in Pakistan and other Islamic nations as the military of the nation is not strong enough to defend their nation and its people from these militant activities. Due to all these reason not only business and growth of the country had suffered but also international sports and other activities.
In conclusion, while some may argue that Arts is as important as good military power in a nation for the overall growth of a nation. But this should not come at a cost of weaker military power of a nation as if a nation is not able to defend itself than having established itself in the field of Arts will not do any good as observed in above mentioned example for Pakistan. Even though Pakistan is very rich in arts and culture like great paintings, very good novels but in today's world its not able to live to its full potential due to unstable situation in the nation caused by weak military power of the nation.
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...untries safe from infiltration/invasion.Due to a strong military power of a nation ...
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... on Military than on Arts. Secondly, its a very important requirement to have a ...
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...ilitary power of a nation as if a nation is not able to defend itself than having...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2058.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 430.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78604651163 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90342480675 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.418604651163 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 668.7 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.1003750093 60.3974514979 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.0 118.986275619 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7142857143 23.4991977007 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.21951772744 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0943015118865 0.243740707755 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0422876100098 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044975229196 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0626407138526 0.150359130593 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391909159554 0.0667264976115 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.8420337079 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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