Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
This topic raises a controversial issues as to whether Government should appropriate funds in arts as much as they do in military. I strongly disagree with point as they impact of military can not be compare with the impact of arts in any society or country. The safety of any of any country border is in the hand of the military and not the people in the field of arts. To further bolster my viewpoint, I would illustrate with examples in subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, the importance and impact of arts must be outlined, before appropriation of funds, let alone invest as much as we do in military in it. For example, every country border immune to attack, becomes invulnerable because of the presence of the military men. Using america artists as instance, the likes of Jay Z and Drake can not go to the border of any country to say they want to protect their country from smugglers. The safety of any country should be paramount to any government and arts play no role in contributing to this.
Furthermore, if the country isn't safe, the artists/celebrities would prefer to travel/relocate to countries where their properties and lives will be protected. For instance, most of the celebrities in the northern part of Nigeria are relocated to the southern part due to the reason that the states are not safe to stay; prone to terrorists attack, despite the so much allocation their governments invested in arts, so it will burgeon and serve as another source of income for the states.
Admittedly, arts tends to bring what amuses citizenry, without arts the country would be a boring place. However, what's is the essence of investing so much in a sector that doesn't guarantee the safety of my life and property.
In conclusion, although they are not two poles apart; arts and military are slightly interwoven. As long as some measurements are performed or some areas are involved arts should not be given as much funds as military.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1618.0 2235.4752809 72% => OK
No of words: 336.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81547619048 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86288485516 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511904761905 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 704.065955056 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.7371310591 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.571428571 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 5.21951772744 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159520285422 0.243740707755 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0592778835865 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465672853887 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0934450912908 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319780990849 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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