Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and suppor

Arts and military are totally different when it comes to serve the society. They both individually play discrete roles to help society develop and achieve success. Art is related to culture, tradition, religion. Art defines the beauty of the society. Whereas Military means serving for the society. Military soldiers perform their duties at the border to protect the nation from the enemies. Hence it is important and necessary for the government to invest in the military. However the question is should government invest more in the arts as they do in military. In my opinion they both play a different role in the society and comparing the investment is a crucial task.

Arts is an emerging field for the students to study. There are many colleges which are undertaking different art program for students to involve them in arts and allow them to understand the culture of the country. For example, dancing,drawing programs are conducted by the college, stage shows are organised. For such programs, they require funding from the government. Hence it is important for government to invest in arts to help students which are the future of the India to better understand the culture of their country.

On the other hand, comparing the investment done in the military is totally not valid. Because investment in the military is mandatory and important because it is for the nation to be safe from the enemies. Investment in military is huge because they require weapons to fight with the enemies at the border. There are many weapons imported from other countries to make sure that the soldiers can fight with full power against the enemies.

I believe that both arts and military have their own importance in the society. If there isn't any investment made in the arts then the society will be deprived of its culture and tradition. As technology is required for a nation to progress, the same way arts is also important aspect needed in the society to develop. Government should fund the organization conducting different programs like exhibition of traditional clothes during navratri. This funding will help to develop arts which will in turn help to develop the society as a whole.

In conclusion, In my view point, arts and military have different role to play in the society and investment in both will surely lead the society towards the development.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, so, then, whereas, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, in my view, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1988.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 394.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04568527919 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67615253073 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.428934010152 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.0 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.2227041678 60.3974514979 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.8333333333 118.986275619 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4166666667 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194898998095 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655561293403 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511636186532 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111099169457 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049328945671 0.0667264976115 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.1392134831 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 11.8971910112 42% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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