The reading and lecture are both discussing the ways to protect birds from the glass which is favored building material for modern architecture. Whereas the author of the reading states that though glass is favored building material for modern architecture it is very dangerous for birds. He says that birds are unable to find the difference between the glass and the open air and thus they are harmed by the glass.The author provides various solution which can be used to prevent birds from injuries. The lecturer suggest that the solutions provided by the author is not very useful and provides reason for each of the solution for not being beneficial to protect birds. The lecturer cast doubt on the main points made in the reading by providing three reasons.
First of all, according to the reading, the first solution provided by the author is one-way glass. The author mentions that as only occupants of the building as see outside and birds cannot see through it, they will consider it as a barrier can will not try to go through it. The lecturer disputes this point. He says that, the one way glass outside will reflect like a mirror and birds don't understand mirror. Furthermore he states that, if they see a reflection of a sky or tree in the mirror they feel that it is actually the sky or tree and will try to come closer to it and will thus harm themselves.
Secondly, the reading states that the second solution is colorful design.The glass can be painted with thin stripes , people can see outside through the stripes but birds would see the stripes and would not try to fly through it.Nevertheless, the lecturer refutes this argument. He argues that birds would see the openings between the stripes as a hole and would try to fly through it. In addition he points out that, if they want to implement this design than they would have to paint thick strips and keep small spaces between the strips but the room would appear dark in that case.
Finally, the reading the provides third solution which is magnetic field .On the other hand, the lecturer believes that bird uses magnetic filed only when they travel a long distance , for short distance they uses their. He thinks that the idea of magnetic field will not be of any help to prevent birds from injuries.
In conclusion, although the reading and the lecture are both about how to prevent birds from injuries through glass, the three main points made in the reading are effectively challenged by the lecturer.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, third, thus, whereas, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 5.04856512141 337% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 7.30242825607 219% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 22.412803532 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 30.3222958057 178% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2058.0 1373.03311258 150% => OK
No of words: 433.0 270.72406181 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75288683603 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.04702891845 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36173306334 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 145.348785872 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.427251732102 0.540411800872 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.9 419.366225166 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.23620309051 170% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.2864368662 49.2860985944 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.625 110.228320801 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0625 21.698381199 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3125 7.06452816374 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 4.19205298013 310% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.510261129837 0.272083759551 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.174479637409 0.0996497079465 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103820057109 0.0662205650399 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274043897348 0.162205337803 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0769178972795 0.0443174109184 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.2367328918 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.42419426049 87% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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