GRE sample issue pool essay topic 145
We learn our most valuable lessons in life from struggling with our limitations rather than from enjoying our successes.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
I mostly agree with this given claim that struggling with our shortcomings is when we learn the most important lessons in life rather while enjoying success. And as they say the Journey is more important than the destination; success is the final destination and one's struggle is what makes the journey a learning experience.
When we struggle with our shortcomings ,we tend to find new ways to overcome them. We find new methods to ameliorate them. This is the time when we learn the most important lessons in our life. Thomas Edison once said ‘I didn’t fail, I just found 10,000 ways that won’t work!’.He invented the light bulb after failing numerous times, but in those numerous failures, he learned something new every single time. The culmination of these small learnings is what translates into success at the end.
Moreover, it is during times of struggle that heroes emerge. Heroes like Mahatma Gandhi and Bhagat Singh fought in the struggle of freedom for the Indians. They were just regular Indian denizens before the British Rule. It was the struggling time that woke up the leader in them that led India to freedom. Both of them in their own ways evoked the emotion of patriotism amongst the common people of India. Such lessons of patriotism, peace, and unity cannot be learnt in unchallenging times of success. Had it been not for them,india would have had to fight a longer battle for its freedom.
However, Success is the sweet nectar at the end of the struggle.It is like the light at the end of the journey. Success helps us to look back and feel accomplished of the journey we took. Hence It is reasonable to state that at the end of the day if we succeed, it will be unlike anything other, but if we fail, there are still be plenty of vital lessons to learn before the door of success opens.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 264, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...n; success is the final destination and ones struggle is what makes the journey a le...
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Line 2, column 39, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... When we struggle with our shortcomings ,we tend to find new ways to overcome the...
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Line 2, column 277, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: He
...ust found 10,000 ways that won’t work!’.He invented the light bulb after failing n...
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Line 4, column 528, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , india
...mes of success. Had it been not for them,india would have had to fight a longer battle...
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Line 6, column 65, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...sweet nectar at the end of the struggle.It is like the light at the end of the jou...
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Line 6, column 189, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...el accomplished of the journey we took. Hence It is reasonable to state that at the e...
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Line 6, column 329, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
... other, but if we fail, there are still be plenty of vital lessons to learn before...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, look, moreover, so, still, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1510.0 2235.4752809 68% => OK
No of words: 320.0 442.535393258 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71875 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47833582016 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 704.065955056 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.5911763851 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.8235294118 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8235294118 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.35294117647 5.21951772744 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212603048026 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715767418864 0.0831039109588 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0998823369604 0.0758088955206 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143280244334 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104328781744 0.0667264976115 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.1392134831 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.8420337079 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.1743820225 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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