The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries...
The author states that contemporaries are not able to understand the importance and greatness of individuals who live with them and it will found only by future people. I partly agree with this assertion that by time passing many ambiguities may become obvious, but in some cases, many great men have been acclaimed, when they were alive. I believe that this assertion highly depends on the social condition and religious beliefs that people have at that time, as well as subject area of the issue. There are some examples to support my preference, which are discussed below.
In many respects, people strongly believed to their religions. Religious fanaticism made them accept many superstitions as facts. Even being curious about these so-called facts was an illegitimate action. For instant, Galileo, a famous astronomer, lived in such situation that every questionable issue was answered by religious leaders. At that time people believed that the Earth is center of the world and every planets and stars, even the Sun, rotates around it and this assertion was written in religious books. During that particular time, Galileo devoted himself to studying about planets movement. After a great deal of attempts, he discovered a shocking fact. He stated that not only the Earth is not the center of the world, but also it rotates around the Sun. He actually deserved great acclaims, but unfortunately he called as a criminal person, who tried to ignore religious beliefs. Due to his claim, he was condemned to spend the rest of his life in prison.
On the other hand, nowadays, Bill Gates is well-known as one of the most successful and richest men in the world. He immersed himself in computer programming and his efforts became a turning point in computer science. Every one of us is taking advantages of his inventions during working with computers. Microsoft is the most popular computer-based corporation, which its chairman cannot be anyone but Gates. Moreover, he has been acclaimed in any ceremonies and people like to buy his trustworthy software.
Now some questions may arise in one's mind after reading the claim that no great man is highly praised by contemporaries. By having a more precise look at the reasons, we will find that being acclaimed is highly depends on the need of people on the time. Nowadays, improving at the dissemination of information and computer software is one of the most necessities that Gates put all his energy on it. On the other hand, the movement of earth did not only change the people lives but also would destroyed their religious beliefs. From other point of view, the authorities play an important roles to makes someone be famous or not. If one's theory would not be harmful, they may let it publish. Some assertions are like a threat for the authorities, which most of them are related to political or religious matters. Therefore, the field which great men work at, can cause them to improve or not. Artists, scientists and athletes who their improvements have no conflict with the bases on social beliefs and the authorities power have more chance to be acclaimed by their contemporaries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...are. Now some questions may arise in ones mind after reading the claim that no gr...
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Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'destroy'
Suggestion: destroy
... change the people lives but also would destroyed their religious beliefs. From other poi...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'role'?
Suggestion: role
...view, the authorities play an important roles to makes someone be famous or not. If o...
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Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...lay an important roles to makes someone be famous or not. If ones theory would not...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...s to makes someone be famous or not. If ones theory would not be harmful, they may l...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, as well as, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2625.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 525.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75740585965 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518095238095 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 816.3 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.8655167674 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.75 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.96428571429 5.21951772744 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216325471204 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051613037962 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604645504846 0.0758088955206 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121550021539 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0773184985541 0.0667264976115 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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