People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
It is said that the behavior of people is determined by external factors that are out of their control, and they do not have any role in making them. I agree with this statement.
Behaviour is a trait of the personality of an individual. It is how a person reacts to the given situation. People have different behavior, and this is what differentiates them from each other. The behavior of people can be influenced by genetic and external factors. Genetic factors including the demeanors that are transmitted from the parents, and external factors such as the environment in which a person is placed or people who the person communicates with. All of these factors can affect the behavior of an individual differently.
First, we start with the parents and the childhood period. Parents are the first individuals whom children are familiarized with. Home is the first place in which children are acculturated, and they are taught about different manners. Therefore, parents have the most important role in the shaping of behavior in children. We can see that our personalities today are a reflection of what we have faced in their childhood. For example, if a person had a family with strong morals and balanced manners in his/her childhood, now he/she would have better and calm behavior in front of others. By contrast, a person in a family with aggressive demeanors would have antisocial behavior in his/her adulthood. In this case, the behavior of individuals is shaped by their family, and they do not have any role in this issue.
The second factor is peer pressure on individuals in their adolescent period. This factor is every parent's fear because in this period people are influenced by their friends, and they tend to fall into the line with them. Most people believe that if a person communicates with negative individuals, after a while their behavior will surely show up in his/her character. Their behavior becomes a part of his/her personality.
The third factor is the environment in which people are influenced by different external factors such as individuals, economic and social conditions and something like them. The best example for this factor is the manager of Pepsi company who was in a traditional family in the south of India but because of the supports and opportunities that she received from her environment, she turned into a successful person with a dynamic personality.
The final factor is genetic factors that can be inherited from parents. Some manners are instinctive and they are transmitted from the parents. For example, to be kind or stingy can be transmitted from parents to children.
In conclusion, I believed that the behavior of a person can be influenced by different external and internal factors that are out of control of his / her. Nevertheless, sometimes people can choose which behavior is suitable for them and reinforce it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, third, while, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 13.1623246493 243% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 58.0 24.0651302605 241% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 41.998997996 164% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2420.0 1615.20841683 150% => OK
No of words: 478.0 315.596192385 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06276150628 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88289097257 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.422594142259 0.561755894193 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 756.0 506.74238477 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 16.0721442886 168% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.6542674366 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.6296296296 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7037037037 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77777777778 7.06120827912 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 3.4128256513 469% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153961397975 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535749702153 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552551951186 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0963268684932 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064190275379 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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