Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
It is said that students should be encouraged and prepared for lucrative careers by educational institutions. I agree with this statement to some extent.
On the one hand, I believe that students should be freedom to choose fields of study that are appealing to them. The reason is that when they study their favorite courses, they can better prepare themselves for the future. They can be more successful in their field of study and make it a lucrative job for themselves. In my view, students should be allowed to follow their aspirations and they should not be advised to pursue a certain field. If educators only encourage students to choose special careers, this idea will be created for them that some careers do not lead them to lucrative jobs. For example, in most countries, teachers encourage their students to be a doctor or an engineer and a lawyer but they discourage them from some fields such as agriculture and art. While agricultural students can have hen or fish rearing businesses and earn enough money compared to their counterparts in other fields. Or we have some famous artists who are very successful in their field and they have good lives.
On the other hand, in my opinion, educational institution have this duty to have enough search for successful and lucrative jobs in the real world of work. Teachers and scientific institutions have this role to guide students about different fields in the real world. They have to tell students which field of study has a better future and which one has a better salary or income. For example, all of us know that medicine is a lucrative job because all people in their lives get sick and they become ill, so they need a doctor. All cities and hospitals or health centers need doctors in order to treat people. Therefore, educational institutions should advise students about the career they want to choose.
To summarize, in my view, educational centers should only advise students about different jobs but then students should be left to choose their favorite careers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean ''?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, then, therefore, while, for example, such as, in my opinion, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1710.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 346.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94219653179 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61285263599 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485549132948 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.6690440017 60.3974514979 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.588235294 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3529411765 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05882352941 5.21951772744 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.462798459266 0.243740707755 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159378479028 0.0831039109588 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106297158294 0.0758088955206 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.292557856575 0.150359130593 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0801506154185 0.0667264976115 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 100.480337079 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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