If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it are justifiable.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
This topic raises the controversial issue of whether it is justifiable to pursuit a worthy goal by any means. Indisputably, it is important to focus and locate any possible mean that it will be advocative to fulfill a dream. Nevertheless, there are specific limitations in the range of the means from the scope of legality firstly but also in the terms of morality. Thus, I generally disagree with the opinion that all the means which are taken to achieve a goal are justifiable and would argue that when someone scratch his/her strategy to pursuit his/her purpose, it does not matter the final result but is more important the route that you followed to end at this result.
First of all, it is lucid that all means and methods which are taken by someone who wants to succeed there are not legal. I would like to point out that these people who set a worthy but difficult task are usually inclined to move at the edges of the legislation and sometimes to violate the rules in order to have the benefit in comparison with their rivals. To illustrate, let us look at the sector of sports and take the example of Armstrong, the French bicycler who was a myth in his sport. However, some years before it is revealed that Armstrong took illegal substances in order to enhance his performance and all his records and metals are cancelled. In this circumstance, obviously the mean that is taken by Armstrong is not acceptable at all. Concequently, it is apparent that all means are of course not justiable in order to achieve a goal.
Furthermore, one aspect of this issue is the moral impact of these means and methods that are taken by someone who chase a worthy goal. Specifically, I would like to take an example of the sector of education, at the case of a student who pursuit great grades for his/her scholarship but also has the financial capability to give money in elder students to complete some assignments in order of him/her. Both common sense and personal experience have told us that is surely unacceptable and unfair for the rest of the students. Hence, all the evidence above demonstrates that someone who set a worthy goal, he/she is not justified to use all the means to achieve it.
In conclusion, although it is generally acceptable that huge and important goals require analogical sacrifices and means to achieve them, the posture and principles that someone who pursuit these goals is more important as with this way he/she leave his/her outprint to the world.
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...at you followed to end at this result. First of all, it is lucid that all means...
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... justiable in order to achieve a goal. Furthermore, one aspect of this issue is...
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... more important as with this way he/she leave his/her outprint to the world.
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...he leave his/her outprint to the world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, thus, in conclusion, of course, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.3162921348 212% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 56.0 33.0505617978 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 432.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74768518519 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68367514214 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476851851852 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.1553484716 60.3974514979 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.733333333 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8 23.4991977007 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53333333333 5.21951772744 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161486919113 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0576000365992 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0400916897134 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103458550683 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479576518435 0.0667264976115 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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