If rituals did not exist, we would have to invent them. We need ceremonies and rituals to help us define ourselves socially and culturally.
Rituals have been known to exist since the very beginning of our mankind. It has passed on to us by our ancestors and we have followed them religiously without questioning their credibility for years. From the beginning of life when an individual is born till the end of life we follow some definite rituals that have been known to us. Also different religions, castes, sects and ethnic groups have a definite set of rituals and ceremonies which are to be followed. The author claims that we would have to invent rituals and ceremonies if they didn’t exist and also, they help us define ourselves culturally and socially. However, I strongly disagree with the both the claims of the author.
Firstly, we live in a modern world where people are becoming more open and broad minded. The world today is equipped with development of science and technology. In this modern world people will definitely find it futile to invent rituals if they had not existing since the beginning. They feel that these rituals won’t serve for any beneficial purposes to the society. Moreover, people these days have started feeling that the rituals and ceremonies that have existed since the very beginning as meaningless but still have to follow them as they are passed to them by their ancestors and also, due to the fear of the society.
Secondly, as people are getting more educated and literate they feel that these rituals and ceremonies are not beneficial at all as they waste a considerable amount of time and money. Consider the case of marriages in India where people sacrifice their lifetime savings in order to spend extravagantly on marriages as a part of their rituals and ceremonies. Such huge spending in the order to follow the rituals makes them pointless as they do not serve to be beneficial in any way. Rather, people these days are preferring court marriages where they can get married in a day thus saving a significant amount of money and time.
Thirdly, there are other areas which we need to focus on for ensuring our social and cultural identity. Rituals and ceremonies are not the factors that help us to define ourselves culturally and socially. There are various other factors which help us to define ourselves socially and culturally. Social beliefs, ideologies, language, folk music, art and dance, literature etc. help us to define our socially and culturally. However, in this competitive world we need to look ourselves above our social and cultural backgrounds. We rather need ourselves to get educated and make ourselves compatible to this modern world. In this way a country can achieve its development and become a major superpower across the whole world. Look at the country of United States where people from different castes, ethnicities, races, religions and even people from different countries reside. But, its citizens rather than ensuring their social and cultural identity felt themselves to ensure their economic and social status in order to survive and thus, ensuring overall development of the country.
In sum, I would like to conclude by stating that rituals are not at all essential in the modern world which has achieved a huge progress above the social and cultural identity. People in today’s world won’t find it essential to invent rituals if they did not exist and also, rituals and ceremonies are not the only factors for our social and cultural identity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'huge progress'.
Suggestion: huge progress
... in the modern world which has achieved a huge progress above the social and cultural identity....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 33.0 14.8657303371 222% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 33.0505617978 209% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2861.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 568.0 442.535393258 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03697183099 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88187981987 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62738294084 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.417253521127 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 912.6 704.065955056 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4332300985 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.962962963 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.037037037 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.451460369346 0.243740707755 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131223619078 0.0831039109588 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111091325654 0.0758088955206 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247981017013 0.150359130593 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107929645713 0.0667264976115 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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