In the response, it is stated that Tagus should make use of engineered millet high seeds to overcome the deficiency of Vitamin A. So , At first glance this argument appeals to be convincing but further reflection reveals that it is rife with holes and assumptions. Stated in this way, it fails to consider several factors on the basis of which it could be evaluated.
To begin with, author claims that the new breed of millet high should be produced to deal with Vitamin A. However the author does not provide any substantiate evidence of the contents of millet high and is millet high sufficient source of Vitamin A. It is no where mentioned that millet high is good source of Vitamin A. Even if it has commensurate amount of Vitamin A, what about other vitamins and nutrients that a human body needs. Furthermore, How reliable is the claim made by international development organization in response to deficiency of Vitamin A to consider the production of millet high seeds.
In addition to this, author readily assumes that there are no other substitutes for vitamin A than millet high and he urges to grow the seed which are not cost effective. Firstly, it is mentioned that Tagus is impoverished nation and over that if millet costs more, Does this sound cogent, that farmers should grow millet high. Is it not possible that in the country like Tagus people are relying on the other sources of Vitamin A because of millet high affordability.
Finally, author states that since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. This is very weak assumption again. Author does not considers the people's reluctance to engineered breed. It is possible that people of Tagus would not prefer artificial breed over natural breed. There should be evidence that provides the predilection of Tagus people for millet breed.
In conclusion, this argument is flawed for several reasons and is therefore unconvincing. It could be strengthened if author clearly states all the relevant facts about millet high seeds, other sources of Vitamin A, are the fields and agriculture apt for these new seeds, people's opinions to consume engineered millet high. Without this information, argument remains unsubstantiated and open to debate
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...overcome the deficiency of Vitamin A. So , At first glance this argument appeals t...
^^
Line 3, column 257, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...h sufficient source of Vitamin A. It is no where mentioned that millet high is goo...
^^
Line 3, column 429, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'need'?
Suggestion: need
...itamins and nutrients that a human body needs. Furthermore, How reliable is the claim...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 125, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'growing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'urge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: growing
...vitamin A than millet high and he urges to grow the seed which are not cost effective. ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 172, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'consider'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: consider
... weak assumption again. Author does not considers the peoples reluctance to engineered br...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 172, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'consider'
Suggestion: consider
... weak assumption again. Author does not considers the peoples reluctance to engineered br...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 186, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...on again. Author does not considers the peoples reluctance to engineered breed. It is p...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, then, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1891.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 376.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02925531915 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72610659302 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476063829787 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.8158435578 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5263157895 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7894736842 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21052631579 5.21951772744 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.524527357572 0.243740707755 215% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161427056932 0.0831039109588 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0867237878498 0.0758088955206 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288411080719 0.150359130593 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665605965448 0.0667264976115 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...overcome the deficiency of Vitamin A. So , At first glance this argument appeals t...
^^
Line 3, column 257, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...h sufficient source of Vitamin A. It is no where mentioned that millet high is goo...
^^
Line 3, column 429, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'need'?
Suggestion: need
...itamins and nutrients that a human body needs. Furthermore, How reliable is the claim...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 125, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'growing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'urge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: growing
...vitamin A than millet high and he urges to grow the seed which are not cost effective. ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 172, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'consider'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: consider
... weak assumption again. Author does not considers the peoples reluctance to engineered br...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 172, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'consider'
Suggestion: consider
... weak assumption again. Author does not considers the peoples reluctance to engineered br...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 186, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...on again. Author does not considers the peoples reluctance to engineered breed. It is p...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, then, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1891.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 376.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02925531915 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72610659302 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476063829787 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.8158435578 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5263157895 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7894736842 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21052631579 5.21951772744 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.524527357572 0.243740707755 215% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161427056932 0.0831039109588 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0867237878498 0.0758088955206 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288411080719 0.150359130593 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665605965448 0.0667264976115 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.