It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are generated and preserved.
A nation’s cultural traditions play a key role in the nation’s identity. They define the people’s way of living in that nation and also represent the heritage and history of that nation. The prompt claims that the cultural traditions of the nation is generated and preserved primarily in the cities. I find myself mostly disagreeing with that claim for the following reasons.
The busy lives of people living in the cities leads to the dilution in cultural traditions. A lot of big businesses run their operations from cities and everyone in general is very busy. Because of this it has become quite common to spend less time on things that usually used to take up significant time. For example, people used to perform long prayers on some festivals and nowadays, it has been shortened to small prayers. People are willing to spend lesser time on things that don’t contribute to their material pleasure and usually cultural traditions are the first to be affected by that behaviour. Hence, it is unlikely that cultural traditions can be preserved primarily by cities. In contrast, the rural areas or areas of a nation that are not as busy as cities are much more likely to preserve these traditions as people living here have much more leisure on their hands and hence, are more willing to spend their time and efforts on following cultural traditions.
People from all over the world keep visiting cities in a nation. It is much likely for foreigners living in the nation to live in cities rather than other nations. Since people from other nations tend to follow different cultural traditions, their interaction with natives will also have an affect on the cultural traditions being followed there. For example, cities like New Jersey are now a home to huge Indian population whose cultural traditions are quite different from those of the Americans. Situations like these can lead to a significant change in the cultural traditions being followed in that city especially when foreigners start to live with the native people. It can be argued that the combination of these diverse cultural traditions can lead to a new hybrid culture and this culture can evolve to become the new identity of the nation, thus generating the nation’s culture. The problem with this argument is that, such a tradition cannot stay constant and shall keep changing as the diversity of people keeps changing and hence cannot be preserved.
In conclusion, it is quite difficult for the cities of a nation to be the primary sources of generating and preserving its cultures because the rapid pace of lives of people in cities and the constantly changing diversity of the cities of nations are conducive to the dilution and modification of the cultural traditions being followed there.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...eraction with natives will also have an affect on the cultural traditions being followed ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2319.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 463.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00863930886 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64201873658 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.436285097192 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.0 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.0515743262 60.3974514979 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.052631579 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3684210526 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73684210526 5.21951772744 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.485528372273 0.243740707755 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.176528320592 0.0831039109588 212% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.155485486236 0.0758088955206 205% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.364041266123 0.150359130593 242% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0803271146937 0.0667264976115 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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