It is primarily through our identification with social groups that we define ourselves.
Human beings are social animals. The fact that people rely on the help of others, and have a need to connect with those within our social circles seem to imply that we can be defined by these people as well. However, I believe social groups should not be the primary way for us to determine our own self. There are many facets of our personality and will that shape us as who we are.
It’s true that we see ourselves through the eyes of others. According to one psychological theory, the self is partly shaped by other people’s opinions. This is because we realize who we are from friends and family when they point out our own characteristic traits. Since our own self-introspection may not be accurate, we look to those who interact closely with us to see ourselves more clearly. This is why college students are advised to send their graduate SOPs to their professors, friends and family, for they are those close enough to provide insight on what kind of a student they are.
However, there are times when we do not believe in other people’s view of ourselves. For example, the hackneyed phrase of “beauty in the eyes of the beholder.” While someone may consider themself to be unattractive, they can perhaps be considered dazzling in the eyes of loved ones. In this case, those who are not confident would not feel empowered despite the words of others. There are also times when we disagree with people we have intimate relationships with. For example, parents might see stability as the most important factor when choosing a career; yet, youngsters with dreams of their own would reject parents’ advice to chase their own dreams. Much like what cliche movies talk about finding oneself, following your parents’ footsteps is their dream, not yours. A child is not defined by their parents.
Not to mention, it is impossible to be defined by social groups when people you become friends with can vary across different types. Anyone can seek the friendship of another with an open mind, and though that mindset can have the person be determined as “open-minded,” their friends can range from introverted to extroverted, or classical lovers to rock fanatics. Though “birds of a feather flock together,” that does not necessarily mean that we only interact with those who are similar to us. If that is the case, we might even be the ones who influence our social groups. Perhaps we are not defined by those we hang around with, but by how we influence those around us. Though we seek validation from our peers through imitation of others’ behaviors, we also change the people we are close to.
Despite the many influences from our family and friends, our own identity is not primarily associated with our own interaction with them. We can choose to interact with different people, but not be defined by their actions. In fact, we can become those who change others in our society, and prove ourselves to be someone who is able to shape who we are through our own free will.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 567, Rule ID: KIND_OF_A[1]
Message: Don't include 'a' after a classification term. Use simply 'kind of'.
Suggestion: kind of
...close enough to provide insight on what kind of a student they are. However, there a...
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Line 3, column 595, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ght on what kind of a student they are. However, there are times when we do not ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, well, while, for example, in fact, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.5258426966 169% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 81.0 33.0505617978 245% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2493.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 519.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80346820809 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62827792717 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477842003854 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.074089108 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.72 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.76 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.24 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361583493349 0.243740707755 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115367738569 0.0831039109588 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800314095909 0.0758088955206 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233802809678 0.150359130593 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0843508117435 0.0667264976115 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.