It is primarily through our identification with social groups that we define ourselves.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Identity helps us make decisions and know how to behave appropriately, and social identity allows us to be part of groups and gain a sense of belonging in our social world. Therefore, people usually strive to be involved in a social group they admire. The author states that we must identify with our social groups to define ourselves. However, the following essay will argue that the claim may not always be the case.
Admittedly, in some cases, the statement might hold true that identification with social groups plays a vital role in one's identification. Some people are born to adhere to their social norms and cultures strictly. Take India's caste system, for example. India's caste system divided its people into hierarchical groups based on their karma, birth, personality, and religion. Individuals are destined to be in a specific class even before birth. Those from lower casts could not climb to the upper classes and gain equal rights and privileges throughout their lives. Even though one wants to define themselves with their value and will, their inherent characteristics would never change, indicating that modifying their given class is impossible. Thus, one should admit that they must define themselves according to the social group they belong to from their birth. Accordingly, based on the above example, the author's argument that society defines people's identity seems plausible to some degree.
However, in most societies, individuals can identify themselves without social restriction. This is because one can decide not to be bounded by their social group. Galileo Galilei could be a compromising instance. Galilei adhered to Copernican theory that advocates a heliocentric model, the notion that the Sun is the center of the world. On the contrary, many people during that era followed geocentric theory, stating that the earth is the center of the universe. Despite fierce criticism from the public and Catholic churches, he did not comply with the mainstream's identification. Instead, he took the path less traveled, and through his differentiation, he could construct his unique identity apart from the leading society. Also, he could rectify the misconception in the field of astronomy. Hence, it is credible to state that identifying with social background is not necessary to define people.
In conclusion, all things considered, the idea that defining individuals through obeying social orders is partially plausible, as discussed above. Regardless of society's norms and values to the general population, the public can determine their nature through their efforts. Thus, we need to endeavor to achieve our idealized identity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Suggestion: authors'; author's
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'mainstreams'' or 'mainstream's'?
Suggestion: mainstreams'; mainstream's
...ic churches, he did not comply with the mainstreams identification. Instead, he took the pa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, apart from, for example, in conclusion, in some cases, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2251.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 417.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39808153477 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82890488947 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568345323741 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.5505458236 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.04 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.68 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.83258426966 269% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154541957467 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0453027352397 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489916288417 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.099493577094 0.150359130593 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0216042386647 0.0667264976115 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.74 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 100.480337079 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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