Leaders are created by the demands that are placed on them.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Ordinary people stand up and take responsibilities in dire situations, or in times of need. Someone out of the ordinary charges forward and takes the command in his or hands and when demands are placed on them, they become a leader. This is suggested in the prompt and I strongly agree with the statement. This statement can be fortified with a couple of examples.
Leaders are a direct response to the need of improvement around them. In times of distress, some people rise to drive themselves and the people around them out of misery, no matter who they are. This is what a leader is. For example, during the second world war, when the people of Germany were agitated, poor and generally not in a good state, an infamous leader in the form of Adolf Hitler rose to prominence. Demands on him were that he avenged Germany's defeat in the first war and prove to the world that they were not weak. Through the course of history, there have been uncountable such leaders who fought for their country's fame such as Sir Winston Churchill, Mahatma Gandhi etc. Perhaps, this might be one of the strongest demands that can be placed on a person who inevitably leads his or her entire nation.
In addition, there could be another less innocuous demand that causes a man or woman to raise as a leader. Demands like driving a company out of bankruptcy, or increasing the revenue of a company. In a startup, for instance, during it's inception, there is not a 'prominent' figure. It's founders are together taking the crucial decisions. But at a later stage, when needs arise for a leader, then it is generally seen that one of the founders take over the decision making process thus leading the company to arguably better future. Not everyone can be a leader and this is elucidated when demands to perform better arises.
One would argue that despite there not being any strong demands, every country and company has a head. It can be easily refuted by taking clues from our history. History has shown that whenever there is a strong demand from the public, the leader of the nation has been changed. Whenever there is a challenge to revive a dying company, a new head is chosen. And this process repeats until the new leader is in fact a leader in every sense of the word, not some nominal head functioning merely for a period of stagnation. Thus, in my opinion, demands do create leaders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 134, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...ome people rise to drive themselves and the people around them out of misery, no matter who they are. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1962.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 422.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64928909953 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47228068473 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54028436019 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.8121527193 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3043478261 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.347826087 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82608695652 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153693281491 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0477127650697 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0296286529921 0.0758088955206 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103365316138 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342081457993 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 14.1392134831 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 12.1639044944 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.