A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
A nation, in order to develop in every aspect, should be able to produce individuals who are proficient in the fields in which they work. By mandating every student to study the same curriculum, a nation would be devoiding the young minds of the different areas of study out in the world. To refute the given proposition, allow me to use some hypotheses in the forthcoming paragraphs.
Nascent mind is the most vulnerable thing and if used correctly can be advantageous to the entire world. And if we do not manifest the potential areas of interest in the developing minds of perhaps the next Stephanie Hawking, Steve Jobs or David Attenborough, it could not only be deleterious to the development of country in question but also to the interest of the world. Keep in mind that the people I mentioned earlier belong to disparate professions and if a student is not exposed to the various curriculum, then how could he/she be able to discover the field of study in which their interest is the greatest and perhaps could do something unprecedented.
Along with numerous areas of interests, we would be depriving the children of their comfortable rate of study. If we are subjecting them to the same curriculum, then it would not be unreasonable to assume that their studying conditions would also be identical or at least similar. This would do disservice to everyone as the results of countless studies around the world are in coherence with each other that every child has different learning pattern and style of study. So, the same curriculum would not only be harmful for their future profession but also detrimental to their health in the long run.
Every individual is unique and should be entitled to flourish in the area that he/she is most inclined towards. One child may have penchant for academics while other may have more fondness for sports. Almost everyone would agree that for the betterment of a nation, producing good sportsmen is as imperative as producing good scholars. And for achieving so, relying on merely one curriculum would be impetuous. Hence, in my opinion, the given proposition needs some improvement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 537, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...rious curriculum, then how could he/she be able to discover the field of study in ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, then, while, at least, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1781.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 360.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94722222222 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82564179315 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516666666667 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.5592696746 60.3974514979 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.733333333 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46666666667 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140141901579 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0506269964184 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.047955710717 0.0758088955206 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0964405840826 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514102553623 0.0667264976115 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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