The real talent of a popular musician cannot accurately be assessed until the musician has been dead for several generations, so that his or her fame does not interfere with the honest assessment.
The author states that the real talent of a popular musician can only be accurately assessed if he or she is alive. If it is true then Michael Jackson would never have been crowned the tite of King of Pop in his lifetime,The Beetles would never have emassed such great following and many of the current generation musicians would have remained unknown.
Assessment of talent should not have to do anything with fame. A good talent does not need In his prime, Michael Jackson was revered and regarded as one of the greatest singer ever. He was and is still known as the king of pop. This is because people and critics liked his music. It was his talent that brought him fame and that fame did not interfere with honest assessment of his talent. Even after his death nothing mush has changed about how people look back at him.
When musicians are famous, they are treated as god. It seems that their reign would never end. But after some times after they fail to meet their expectations, even thugh they are famous, people start to think that the musicians talent has been lost. This would not have been true if his/her fame interfered with the honest assessment.
Like I said, assessment should not need generations, it should see whether the musician is able to deliver more than what the people want. When a musician dies, then people do tend to look on the dark side but in the long run their perceptions remain as they were intially.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 158, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[7]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put between 'have' and 'been'.
Suggestion: have never been
...f it is true then Michael Jackson would never have been crowned the tite of King of Pop in his ...
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Line 1, column 221, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , The
... the tite of King of Pop in his lifetime,The Beetles would never have emassed such g...
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Line 3, column 391, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even after” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e with honest assessment of his talent. Even after his death nothing mush has changed abou...
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Line 5, column 220, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'musicians'' or 'musician's'?
Suggestion: musicians'; musician's
... famous, people start to think that the musicians talent has been lost. This would not ha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, still, then, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 58.6224719101 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1188.0 2235.4752809 53% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 258.0 442.535393258 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60465116279 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24266928701 2.79657885939 80% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 215.323595506 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558139534884 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 357.3 704.065955056 51% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.1080118404 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.8571428571 118.986275619 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4285714286 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326317640992 0.243740707755 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110213427375 0.0831039109588 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0974200809792 0.0758088955206 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176284758569 0.150359130593 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446611695572 0.0667264976115 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 14.1392134831 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.8420337079 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.1743820225 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 12.1639044944 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.38706741573 85% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 100.480337079 43% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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