The real talent of a popular musician cannot accurately be assessed until the musician has been dead for several generations, so that his or her fame does not interfere with honest assessment.
music is one of the best forms of art. it can be of many types like pop-music, classical-music, western-music and there are many more. this is an art form which is highly regarded in almost every country. some forms of music represent culture of place, some mock the the society in sardonic way and some are just composed so that they can be listened to when people want to relax.Here the claim suggests that real talent of a popular musician cannot be accurately assessed until the musician has been dead for several generations because, if we judge the musician while he or she is alive our judgement might be influenced because of their fame in the society. I accept this claim upto a certain extent.
Let us take an example of a famous musician Micheal Jackson. His songs are still being played even though he was dead several years ago. On addition to that he is still a inspiration for neophtyes in the field of music and for many luminaries. if he was not really talented this wouldn't have been the situation today, people would have forgotten him by now. The fact that he is still being remembered can be used for us to believe that real talent will never be forgotten.
Although the claim sounds cogent we cannot completely presume that fame would be an influential factor while assessing a musician. A musician will only be in fame only if his or her work is the best. people respond to them shower love towards them only if their songs are well written, have a good music and send a good message. we never generally vaunt someone without reason. so if a person has fame that implies that he or she has done some good work in their field. this should be actually taken as a factor of consideration while assessing musicians because a musician is truly successful only when his music reaches masses.
On the whole I feel that real talent of musician can be known accurately when he or she is alive. Their works speaks for themselves when they are alive or dead. fame should also be considered as one of the factors for assessing his true talent because only when their music is good enough they get fame in the society and it shouldn't be considered a hindrance for assessing true talent of virtuoso.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, if, really, so, still, well, while, i feel, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.5258426966 169% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 58.6224719101 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1836.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 397.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62468513854 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48520803354 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481108312343 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 92.2541653527 60.3974514979 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6315789474 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8947368421 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78947368421 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 7.80617977528 231% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354477715228 0.243740707755 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10124672768 0.0831039109588 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0971598017516 0.0758088955206 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22904798244 0.150359130593 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314125527293 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 12.1639044944 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 100.480337079 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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